We Surrender Honestly to This

We Surrender Honestly to This

A Poem by Seshat Nidaba

this is a love poem, ordinary as such special things are.






























How your lotus eyes summons

The goodness in me, an honesty like

Your cheeks, begging my blood’s

Sudden flowering, I picture your eyes

Like the light of the world


Your summary skin, are like the petals

Where I once laid my racing youth

Your golden face, some miracled heritage

Tangled in your full and towering hair


I want my touch to last forever

I want to hear your voice as if,

To collect the words from your mouth

With my ears and my soul, to know your truth


As completely as anyone ever could

And find your heart in time, sprinkled in flour

And visit your dreams, like some daily bread ritual

I want to be with you, during our nightly travels


Find the purer motion, of your silken singular key

The kind of endless life and joy

Only you could provide me, that moist

Tender swan underwater feeling!


All travels and sorrows have to end

In encircled fire, like a good marriage or

A future land, some prosperity woven

Into the fabric of our future well-being


Pain and work shall all, but sleep now

Let the world propagate its own darkness

Instead we summon the light between us

For we both bow to the pulse, of a higher power.



© 2011 Seshat Nidaba

Author's Note

Seshat Nidaba
I'm sorry if I forget if I'm an "I" or a "We" just sometimes in our love stories, we lost a bit of our identities.

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This poem is just absolutely divine. Your writing is beautiful and your descriptions are perfect. I see romance, I see admiration, I see majestic emotion, I see strength, I see courage, but mostly I see emotion and emotion by itself. It's hardly what they call raw, because you back it all up with an amazing fulfillment of poetry. Wow, you are a wonderful writer, and I can't find anything in this poem that I would change.

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seshat Nidaba

6 Years Ago

Wow this was before comments were possible! Sweet review Meg.


nice write... "Let the world propagate its own darkness", a thought expressed too differently....

Posted 5 Years Ago

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This is amazing. I find love particularly difficult to express through poetry especially since you're saying what's already been said over and over again. Yours though, manages to capture it with imagery which is both beautiful and new :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Posted 7 Years Ago

Oh... I haven't been this emotional over a poem in quite some time. This brings back so many fond memories... Thank you so much for sharing this.

Posted 7 Years Ago

You certainly are a master at love poetry Seshat. I love all that I read that you write and the images that you invoke are so beautiful and often something that I need to take away and let roll over and over in my mind to fully understand your meaning... I love it and it does my heart so much good to read your wonderful verse!! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

The fierce thought behind the words, almost makes one feel dizzy, but in a well rounded way, well done, good read.

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seshat Nidaba

6 Years Ago

I miss your writing and your spirit.
Stunningly beautiful writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago

This is what Valentine's reading is about.I am impressed with your love for another.I hope he loves me like this

Posted 7 Years Ago

This is absolutely beautiful. Love poems are the most difficult thing to write, but you have done well with this one. I love the last two lines...to "summon the light between us", wow!

Posted 7 Years Ago

Plain beautiful, perfect love poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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