Fortune Teller

 

 

Viewing the ripples in a pool of water.

I’ve come to see the vivid illusion of reality.

My divine intervention in the flesh.

My problems desperately cling to me.

Unable to get rid of the guilt.

Looking into the future.

Hoping for vindication from my sins.

Life in the prism of my emotions.

Its lucid and elusive.

Like the happiness that flees from me.

Unable to grasp or take hold of.

I realize that this is it.

The final act in this emotional fiasco.

 

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Reviews

[Angelheaded Hipster]

You are improving so much!! Leaps and bounds! Yay! I have a smile on my face, as I read this. I like how you're stretching past your "norm" and it feels good, no?

Now....let's play with other things to write about...challenge yourself, try a short story, play with a haiku, or acrostic, or whatever...play with formats, trying out different ways to show the journey you care to take us on.

Im rather proud of you kiddo!

[The]

"Unable to get rid of the guilt.

Looking into the future.

Hoping for vindication from my sins."

Just know that there is hope in Christ Jesus.

[Pradnya]

i loved this poem, especailly usage of words,they are simply so good, i think everyone in this world must have come across such thought.

[lori c]

thanks for sharing this with me. i like the way you captured the elusiveness of happiness. water scrying is not often thought of by most when they think of fortune tellers, that too captures my attention. i enjoyed reading this.

[Catrinka]

This is really good - you accurately paint the picture of some of those who come to those of us who read the cards very well - many times the reading turns into a talk session and the person gets the chance to talk to someone who might have additional insight or just another point of view from those close to them. KUDOS on the write!

[Tempest]

I think that of the poems I have read so far you show a lot of maturity and promise as a poet. It is very impressive.

[Gandré]

Must be magical experience when a fortune teller tells you so many things.I liked

My problems desperately cling to me
Unable to get rid of the guilt
Looking into the future
Hoping for vindication from my sins === because those lines characterize this piece for me. Nicely done and charming. I wouldn't have the courage to let the fortune teller speak my future life...bravo.

[Bryce Simonds]

Great poem. The flow, the words you used, everything was great. I loved it. I hope you keep writing this way...and that way would be "Great"