Into the Hourglass

A poem about seeing life through the concept of time itself.

Looking into the hour glass

We see in depth what is to be

Life revolving all around

Nothing is quite just how it seems.

 

One tick of a clock

Can end a life

A life that’s lived to be.

 

But in the depth of misery

Unveiled and now we see.

 

No peace, love, or tranquility.

Author's Note

I know this might be a bit trippy, but I suggest you read it slowly, ponder, and tell me what you got from it. Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[FrancescaX]

Nice...I always look forward to finding this kind of good stuff. It means that someone out there values the life that we have.
Aeron in Gena Showalter's The Darkest Passion, asked his friend Paris why we humans seemed not to care that we were dying.
But we do and it's only our experiences that remind us.

[Sarah Redigan]

said so much with so little words

[Crimson_Catastrophe]

I don't thinks it's trippy at all.
It's very deep, and it has good imagery.
I like the beat and rhythm.
Keep writing!

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

it is very trippy and enjoyable. im glad to be reading ur works

[Nabeela Mobashwer]

I like the simplicity of this piece,, holds some deep meaning in them =)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is different and awesome to have read!

"Looking into the hour glass
We see in depth what is to be" are my favorite lines! It's so true.
Amazing job :D


Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you so much

[Michael Thrower]

:)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome!! :D

[T. Logan]

Good rhyming! I like the part about the clock. I seem to like clocks for some reason.

[afra]

deep and beautiful good job

[Sophie]

I really liked the form, along with the poem, how it went 4 lines, then 3, 2, and then 1. I don't know if it was intentional, but it was cool, sort of reminded me of an hourglass in some weird, obscure way.
Great poem :)

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you, yes that's what I was going for! :D Except, I could have made it longer and went from 1 to 2, 3, etc. But I liked where I ended it. Thanks for reading and reviewing :P