Lala Land

Lala Land

A Poem by Lost in Wonderland

Open the page

Digest the words

Fall into a new universe

A more beautiful world

 

Close my eyes

Against the downpour of tears

At least no one can hurt me here

 

Here in my lonely little lala land

I can dance and sing

And no one will judge me

So I can finally find peace

 

Not like the real world

Where there is fear and hurt

And life shoves you down

To leave you alone in the dirt

 

Please...can't you try to understand me?

© 2012 Lost in Wonderland


Author's Note

Lost in Wonderland
Thanks for reading, I edited the former last stanza and aadded a new one...maybe its better, or maybe ots worse...Idk. If you have any suggestions I'd like to hear them:) God Bless

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I feel the same way, haha. :) Lala land can be interesting, just don't live in it for too long. Keep up the good work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

9 Years Ago

haha thanks!
God Bless:)
So beautiful. Love the words and feel of this. Great, great write, friend. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much:)
God Bless
Honestly, I would suggest rephrasing the last stanza. Not that its bad or anything, but rather it does not fit in too well with the stanzas before it. Try rephrasing it.
Anyhow, lovely concept. Lala land is a place many (perhaps all) of us never want to leave.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lost in Wonderland

9 Years Ago

Thank u, and do u mean the last line, or the last multiple lined stanza?
Tai Ryens

9 Years Ago

My apologies; the last multiple lines stanza. The last line was a perfect ending.
Lost in Wonderland

9 Years Ago

Thank you and I agree about that stanza, it didn't read write to me... I'll work on it:)

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Added on August 4, 2012
Last Updated on August 7, 2012
Tags: Reading, Fantasy, Alone, Sorrow, Fear, Pain, Escape, Poetry

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