Hate me! Break me!

Hate me! Break me!

A Poem by Millie
"

For I challenge you

"

Want me, Need me

Taste me, Love me

Hate me. Break me

Want me, Need me

 Taste me, Love me

Hate me. Break me

 

STOP!

Crowd round the circus is in town

 Watch her perform as you pay more

Want her, Need her.

People whisper

"See her smile? It looks so fake"

Taste her, Love her

People pay more She must be good

Hate her, break her

The crowd come round

Take her to the ground

 

 STOP!

Rip her at the seams

Take her lively hood

Give her nothing

As you take one more Kiss

 Watch her take your money

That dirty w***e Who let her In?

Stop? Never we owed what we payed!

 

She's lost all control

 A young girl at heart

 Lost her way

 Aged by the day

 That little s**t

That dirty w***e

 

Want me! Need me!

Taste me! Love me!

Hate me! Break me!

 

STOP!

NEVER!

© 2011 Millie


Author's Note

Millie
This is for the I challenge you contest/group

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Finally, a contest entry that actually followed the given criteria. Take a look at some of the other entries! They have absolutely NOTHING to do with the contest. SpokenWord won't be happy when she reads them only to find out that nobody read her details on the contest.
As for the poem, I absolutely love the effect of:
"Want me, Need me
Taste me, Love me
Hate me. Break me
Want me, Need me
Taste me, Love me
Hate me. Break me"
Genius! Making it feel like were going in circles on a ride, faster and faster then-- "STOP!" It reminds me of old horror movies where the carnival rides are going by themselves.... I just love it! Great job! For great writing and for following directions.
Kiri

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I liked this one. It's very aggressive.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Finally, a contest entry that actually followed the given criteria. Take a look at some of the other entries! They have absolutely NOTHING to do with the contest. SpokenWord won't be happy when she reads them only to find out that nobody read her details on the contest.
As for the poem, I absolutely love the effect of:
"Want me, Need me
Taste me, Love me
Hate me. Break me
Want me, Need me
Taste me, Love me
Hate me. Break me"
Genius! Making it feel like were going in circles on a ride, faster and faster then-- "STOP!" It reminds me of old horror movies where the carnival rides are going by themselves.... I just love it! Great job! For great writing and for following directions.
Kiri

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WTF did you mean by taste me !!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Millie
Millie

Portsmouth, Copner, United Kingdom



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