Pain

After everything being so numb for so long
I finally feel it.
The Pain of not being able to belong
but anyone who says anything can go get bit
 as I'm rolled to the ambulance
The med's they give me don't change anything
The pain continue's now with avengence
I try not to scream as it begins to feel like a living thing
Trying to break me
Trying to make me breathless
But I refuse to let it take me
But the Pain is relentless
I've felt this before
In body and in soul
It come's from my core
It radiate's like the heat of a smoldering coal
I try not to cry
I do not cry in front of strangers
I do not know why
I'm silent for the ride's remainder
I hide this Pain from my mother and Family
I do not want to worry them further
My sister buy's me a soda handily
And i drink till there's no remainder
I hope this will quell the Pain
Hopes are dashed as it worsened
I hold my stomach under the blanket in vain
I think of who might have listened
To the story of my Pain with out stifling a laugh
I come out of my thought's without result
I think of my day
The other kids making fun me in any way the can
I think of how tomorrow will be and hold back tears of despair and dismay
The Pain worsen's to a Pain that in my mind would probably bring to his knees a grown man
I fake a smile at my father as he asks if I am okay
my mother is at attention again
I answer that I'll be fine with no delay
my mother grins believing my lie, My father frown's at my words not believing them, I think stubborn man
The doctor dismiss's us with prescription in hand
My mother turn's saying how bad for me it is to run the mile
I am ready for the firm reprimand
   But all she does is smile
The Pain fade's and I can finally relax
I'll deal with "them" tomorrow, i think in bliss
even if the pain come's back
I'll fight my way through it,
Like i always have.

Author's Note

This was written solely on the event's of my extremely stressful day so please only constructive criticism

Reviews

[Panda]

Good writing! Loving how it was in the heat of the moment!!! The emotion was amazing! And I'm guessing (by how I read this) bullies? Mean kids? And the pain was more so from them? I loved the line "it radiates like the heat of a smouldering coal" if I quoted that correctly. It's was gripping! lovely work

[J. Viands]

Extremely fluent and relatable for a longer piece it’s not always easy to pull off. As for constructive criticism I would have to say relax separate your thoughts, it is something I struggle with myself and certainly when recalling times of stress. As with all of us proof read always! Anyway I get it I find it really irritating to be rolled away on a gurney if I tried writing about it I’m sure it would be one of those come flying out of your mind faster than you could write it pieces. All and all yet another job well done:)

[Ella]

very good, nicely written :)
Feel free to talk to me if you need to!

[KAREN]

Well I flet the stress of your day for sure, and that's good when you can write a poem and get the readers to feel your words.