The Faceless Man

This story is based on the tale of Slenderman

I hear the steady sound of footsteps pacing around. As I open my eyes, slender beams of light enter my once darkened room. Facing the wall, the shadow of an irregularly tall man appears. I hold my breath.

"He's back again." I think to myself.

The man takes another step closer. I try to exhale but cough instead. He knows I'm awake now.

"When you see him, just close your eyes and count to ten." I hear Dr. Tribswab's voice in my head.

I close my eyes to the sight of him taking another step.

"One." I count aloud. I can hear the shakiness in my voice

"Two." With my eyes closer I couldn't see him inching closer.

"Three." I try not to let myself shake.

"Four." I was starting to crack.

"Five." I heard him walking.

"Six." I clinched my fists. My fingernails are piercing my skin.

"Seven." My pillow was damp from tears and blood.

"Eight." I was now shaking uncontrollably.

"Nine." I coughed before I could get the rest of the word out. I took a long pause before saying the last number.

"Ten." I opened my eyes to darkness.

He was gone. It was all a nightmare. I sat up and wiped the sweat off my forehead. I reached out in the darkness, looking for a light switch. I rubbed my hands up and down the walls, feeling for the switch. I feel my finger stumble over a switch. I flick it on. Smiling in relievement, I turn around. My smile fades as my relievement turns to terror.

His black suit always in place, he stood tall. He was a man without a face, though it always told me a story, always the same story.

The only thing I knew was for the first time, I was face to face with the Slenderman.

Author's Note

This story is based on the tale of Slenderman. He is an 8 feet tall man who always wears a black suit and usually a red tie. He has no face. He usually stalks victims for years. He has a history of stalking children. . Usually after a couple years the child will disappear never to be found again. Seeing him usually causes memory loss, insomnia, paranoia, and coughing fits.

Reviews

[Lost in Wonderland]

awesome imagery in this creepy story! i actually just read a story yesterday about this same guy, *shifty eyes*. Nicely done!

[Speak in Silence]

thank you :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

no prob:)

[Steven Cash]

Had to come back and read this. LOL stil scary

[Speak in Silence]

lol XD

[Steven Cash]

Slenderman ftw

OMG I love Urban Legends and this is one of my favs.

[Speak in Silence]

lol same here

[Steven Cash]

Ever heard Observe and Absolve?

[Steven Cash]

Freaked me crapless

[Speak in Silence]

lol same here! I was paranoid for like a week!

[Steven Cash]

I gotta post a book of Urban Legend & put that one in

[Steven Cash]

Aren't You Glad You Didn't Turn On the Light? That's a bit cliche, tho, don't you think?

[Speak in Silence]

lol yeah

[Steven Cash]

Hey, I'm gonna message you about a couple others

[Steven Cash]

But have you heard of 'Man in the Black Cape'?

[Speak in Silence]

nope I haven't

[Steven Cash]

I will message it to you

[Speak in Silence]

okay

[Steven Cash]

I sent it

[Speak in Silence]

okay

[Izel]

It might help the immediacy of the piece if it maintained the present tense. It starts that way, but then veers into past tense. It is definitely suspenseful and riveting.

Perhaps:
"With my eyes close(d)"?

[Speak in Silence]

Okay thanks :)

[V. Bishop]

Very very good.
But "Smiling in revilement"? ... just checking if it was a mispell.
I will enjoy following up on your Slenderman series.

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :) yeah I wasn't really sure how to spell that. I might make a another story I am not sure yet.

[V. Bishop]

To "revile" - is to critique in an abusive manner... perhaps she smiled in relief? Relievement?
read moreTo "revile" - is to critique in an abusive manner... perhaps she smiled in relief? Relievement?
And you may be too young to know the show - but Twin Peaks had a "Giant" character that seems to fit your imagery. Carel Struycken was the actor. Impossibly tall, slender and truly haunting - google him. Best of luck.

[Speak in Silence]

Okay thanks I'm going to fix that error in a minute, umm I don't think I have ever seen that show before. But thanks :)

[Asylum Dormouse]

Oh my god Slenderman...
This is so amazing :D The Slenderman story has always intrigued me. Great imagery!

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

I liked this story. The scheme is very imagery.
Great job!
100/100

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Taylor Ann]

I loved it. The description helped me picture every thing that was happening in the piece. Very well written!

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Alexander143]

Wow! I could see you shake uncontrollably in your bed. Beautiful piece.

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Alexander143]

You're welcome.