The Good, The Evil, And The Fair

Sleep, sleep deprived
Grab my hand, we will go for a ride
Through ocean fronts and fiery blazes
Broken glass and death gazes
Vibrant animals, smell of smoke
Don't eat the cookies or you'll choke

Take deep breaths, inhale the air
Smell the good, the evil and the fair

Dreamy sunrises fill the sky
In this world, you're able to fly
Sore high, melt into the sunset

Fore its only been four hours, but its not over yet

Author's Note

I just wrote this today during reading class actually. My teacher told us to write something about out "happy place" so I wrote a poem about my dreams. I hope everyone likes it :)

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

broken glass and death gazes I love those words,awesome choice of words. Hey maybe you and I can collborate (did I spell that right what a moron,haha) on a write,horror or emotional. I don't see any collabs here,maybe we can start something,hahaha I like your style of writing

[Speak in Silence]

Haha I actually JUST added a comment to one of your comments and I said maybe we could give each other pointers lol that's so ironic. ANYWAYS thank you for all the compliments (:

[Fréyjä Helv..]

It has a nice flow to it... A good read... :)

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks (:

[Dove]

Wow, this is a really good poem. I truly enjoyed the read. Seriously. keep up the great work!

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you (:

[Castonovia]

Dreams such a weird, happy place, I liked it & thought it was sorta catchy:) The descriptions are very vibrant too.

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[under-the-water]

WHAAAAA UR AMAZZZINNNGGGG!!! i have to give you props - i was reading threw the comments of this poem - and someone criticized it. and you said thank you!!! WHAT!!! u seem like such a nice person! the last time someone criticized my poem i got really offended and verbally attacked them. well - anyways, this poem is verryyyy good - and has a cute feeling to it - I'm 13 too - but my writing is.... ehhh... it needs work hahhaa. nice job!!! **cyber high five**

[Speak in Silence]

Haha thanks :) I'm glad I finally meet another 13-year-old on here :) I bet your work is amazing! XD

[Mystik]

I do like it. It's unique with a flare. Keep up the good work :)

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[Rhianne Ney]

I don't get the message of the poem and the title... you're title is the beauty of your poem but for me it looks like you just placed it on purpose in the middle of your poem...
I do like the choice of words but you can still edit it...
Don't let my review put you down you've six reviews and this poem is shelved...
I just state it honestly and I'm not bullying you just helping you... I hope you'll not hate me... But be encouraged on all the reviews you received and please do keep writing (:'

[Speak in Silence]

Oh thanks, I Really I love people that aren't afraid to tell me what they think :) I am actually not done with it yet, but thanks for the tips :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Keep writing, Miss Mayhem

[Speak in Silence]

I will :)

[Anonymous Girl]

I didn't like it but I loved it :) Keep writing :)

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[Anonymous Girl]

No problem :)

[Steven Cash]

I liked it a lot, tho it's dark

[Speak in Silence]

Thanks :)

[faint smile]

I love your twisted humor in this poem, and the creepy yet peaceful mood, good write.

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)