Please (stay)

Please (stay)

A Poem by Speak in Silence

"Please! 
Please stay!
I can't do this on my own!
Baby...you're My everything...
I remembered your birthday,
26th of May!"
Slamming drawers 
Packing your clothes
Heartbroken
New skin exposed
"No! 
I won't stay and watch you destroy yourself
Day in and day out!
What about me?
Do you even care
That every time the blade slides across
It tears me apart?
It's over.
We're beyond repair.."
"Fine! 
Then I'm done too!"
I grabbed the pistol
Placed it over my heart
You looked up from packing
Just to see me whisper 
"Goodbye Brice"
And the gun going off
With a loud start
You grabbed me in your arms
Screamed for me not to leave
Whispering sorry
Praying softly
To the only thing you had left
"God save her soul
But please don't take her away
I need her with me
Please, let her stay
God, I beg of you
If you have to take her
Can you please take me too?"
We were only kids
Kids in love
I may not be with you
But baby, always believe
That if it counts 
I'll always love you

© 2013 Speak in Silence


Author's Note

Speak in Silence
Um I guess this is slightly something I feel? I know it sounds weird...I don't know, it's just something I can't explain.

But this is kinda like a metaphor because this is how I feel sometimes when I talk to my ex. I do think of suicide a lot but that is just because I have bad depression. And half the time I feel like I'm nothing because he left me because of my "problems", but ANYWAYS my ex's name is Brice and his birthday is on the 26th of May so somewhat this poem is based on truth...I guess? I am not a religious person though (I'm Atheist) but my ex is so I know he would pray. But sorry for ranting guys!

Anyways I hope everyone likes. Please, if you like it leave me a review and if you don't leave me one and tell me why you didn't like it or what I could do to improve it.
Thanks for taking the time to read!

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I find whatever emo too cliche. I don't know, it's always predictable. I love the dark stuff, I'm self destructive as well, but this doesn't catch my attention. But I'm not saying it's bad. It's sincere...

I've been through that when suicide was like an option and self inflicted pain was comforting. They tell me it will get better, and it does. You just have to get through that phase. Pain is a consequence of Love. The more you love someone, you're risking yourself more to a greater pain. Keep down expectations...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

I don't always write like this although I do not like this one either. I was just spilling things ou.. read more
Powerful and riveting. Being that deeply in love can be trumatic if the break-up is as intense as you've written it here. Great illustration of this in your poem. Great job. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing
This is a great/strong piece!! I love it ^^...I'v had to many of those moments :/ but we need to stick together; you and I. Were both good writers' lets keep wooing the world with words hehe ^.-

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Haha thank you! I agree. All of us writers should just form some sort of clan lol
Hope's Etro

8 Years Ago

yep ^^ if only this site had groups :/...I would totality join forces with you
Tht's pretty nice write, liked youur "stay".
very touchable poem

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wórdsmíth

8 Years Ago

HEY, if may i ask, the idea to write generated from where ??
Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

I wouldn't say it was based on personal experiences but it basically something that's happened insid.. read more
Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

If you read the Author's Note, it will kinda give you some more information about what this is based.. read more
This was deliciously evil in a way, it hits all the dark spots and i love it.
Sorry to hear about all this, but it definitely produced some good work

very beautiful(:

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Thank you
Very touching piece. First off, this part just got to me:

"God save her soul
But please don't take her away
I need her with me
Please, let her stay

God, I beg of you
If you have to take her
Can you please take me too?"

I don't know- just reading that brought me insane feelings about this piece. You really showed how true love can really be. I really enjoyed how you sort of flipped the true meaning of this, going from you to him. It brought it all together very nicely. 100/100

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Why thank you
Great and nicely versed.

100/100
Keep writing~

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
Rhianne Ney

8 Years Ago

You're welcome keep it up
A sad ending the poem. Killing yourself bring regret and sadness to the people around you. I like the conversation and visions create by the poem. Sort of a happy ending. If last words we hear are love. Maybe we can go to the next place in peace. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and review
whoa I actually really like this, dark, kinda demented, heartwrenching, perfect, makes me feel like it would make good song lyrics to be honest lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


Tsukin Archangel

8 Years Ago

lol i tend to be unable to write without it lol
Speak in Silence

8 Years Ago

Well whatever keeps ya writing!
Tsukin Archangel

8 Years Ago

lol yep >;p

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Added on April 1, 2013
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Tags: god, faith, love, heartbreak, cutting, self harming, destroy, leaving

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