The Ugly Truth

The Ugly Truth

A Poem by Speak in Silence

I saw the car crash
That killed those kids 
Teenage boy
Teenage girl
Traveling at speeds of light and sound
Both heading different directions,
But both lye dying at one
The night was dark
And the sky was crying
They hit head on
The collision splinted the silence
Defied logic
And murdered two guilty lives
Broken glass and bent metal covered the pavement
Both cars strewn in different dirrections 
But both bodies lye motionless,
Together
Blood ran down the pavement with the rain
Fire illuminated the darkness

Bodies of part lovers lye in parish 
Rotting on both of their deathbeds 
Hospital lights defining the obvious truth:
Never fall in love

Daylight broke 
Only to see both chests fall 
But never rise again

© 2013 Speak in Silence


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Very vivid poem, the best line for me was "Hospital lights defining the obvious truth: Never fall in love". opening up to love is terrfying because of this very reason, the fear of being emotionally scarred.

Technical notes-I think you've misspelled "Lie" and when you say "The collision splinted the silence" did you mean "splintered"? as a splint is what you use to hold broken limbs together, apt for the poem, but not the line it was used in.

sorry to nit pick, but other people on the site have got me in the habit, it can only make you a better poet.

Good stuff, well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

6 Years Ago

Oh that's okay! I like when people notice things like that! Thank you btw (:
the last two stanzas are beautiful, I really liked
"Hospital lights defining the obvious truth:

Never fall in love"

because in the end, the pain of having loved and known you could not love again after death must be unreal.. very nice

Posted 6 Years Ago


A powerful and sad poem. Your strong description create visions of sadness and destruction. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


"Hospital lights defining the obvious truth:
Never fall in love"

^^Those two lines were so incredibly powering and I was really able to take in the beauty of this. Now onto the last three lines of yours :)

"Daylight broke
Only to see both chests fall
But never rise again"

^^Gave me chills! I NEVER get chills reading something!

Anyways... Amazing job! I really wish I could give this a 1000/100 but I'll have to give it a 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

6 Years Ago

Awe, thank you so so much! I'm super glad you enjoyed it!
Damn... those last three lines.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is sad and beautiful. Great write. 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


I get the idea behind this, the description is nice (The crash) but i think a lil more information would make it better (like a line explaning why their guilty, or more on their love that brought to their dismiss)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

6 Years Ago

I had A LOT of detail in it but I was typing and it all got deleted and I just re-wrote what I could.. read more
myenigma

6 Years Ago

aw, yea it happens.
Well the flow was bearable sorta jagged, the concept was descriptive and somehow profound. It did remind me of a song of Cannibal Corpse.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Speak in Silence

6 Years Ago

Ah, which song?
Fréyjä Helvití

6 Years Ago

shredded humans...

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Added on June 2, 2013
Last Updated on June 2, 2013
Tags: love, heartbreak, crash, car crash, teenager, teens, lovers, death, murder, hospital, blood, silence, darkness, metaphor

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