Pain

Pain

A Poem by Mistaken
"

the loss of ones self due to another

"

miserable

alone

dread-filled

hate

now i feel nothing

once felt all but can't seem to reach anything

numbness, is the only thing besides pain.

Pains so sharp it takes my breath away...

you left me there standing

while you went into her arms

how could you?

I thought you loved me too.

Pain, now agony, has taken over

gasping for breath but can't stop

knees drawn to my chest; still feel so cold

no heart, nothing but wave after wave of sadness

never to be happy again

I tune everything out

trying hard to show nothing is wrong

hard as I try you know what you did

hope you feel better because now I'm dead.

© 2009 Mistaken


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I like this I think it's very expressive.
I can feel the emotions tighten in this.
It's very well written

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i like this poem good flow. strong words. i liked it a lot

Posted 10 Years Ago


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'knees drawn to my chest; still feel so cold'... i really liked this line... ur poem took me to my past... i really liked a lot..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think it was amazing.
I love how descriptive you are with her pain.

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