Hollow

I live in waking sleep,

And see with sightless eyes,

I walk in rigid step,

With the shadows at my side.

Trapped within my dreamless shell,

I live in atrophy,

Patiently I wait to fade,

Like a raindrop in the sea.

Reviews

[Melinda McQueen]

A write filled with raw emotion.
Great piece.

[emipoemi]

Every line in this poem is blessed with poetic gold! Absolutely awesome! Well done!

[Gaia Octavia]

This is a powerful piece in a tiny package. Those are my favorite kinds of poems. Stripped of all trappings, it comes directly from the soul. I have (and often still do) felt just like this. Apathy and atrophy. This will speak to many many people. Well done.

[ImSJ]

Well done. Simple, direct, powerful. I like it and I hope that for your sake, it's just a conceit and not how you really view life! Again, well done!

[E.Jay]

This poem is excellent. I am a super insomniac. The last line to me is so powerful. Great wording, nice flow. I read over this a bunch, and I just absolutely love it. Great Write!

[Alexis Rose]

I really get this. Most people don't take the time to genuinely read poems; when you truly think about the words, you can somehow relate to the author and understand what they are trying to convey. I love this poem! Keep writing.

[Cherry]

The last line is a powerful statement and image at the same time. Insomnia was my worst enemy at one time. You've done a good job of bringing in detail that show the effects of it. Good writing.

[DirectTangent]

A nice piece - it has an eerie quality.

I've read through a couple of times, still struck by its starkness. I think the ending is quite good. I kept pausing at the word "shell" - wondering about it. Not sure what that means.

Nicely done.

[Kieran Shuttleworth]

Thanks for the review! As for the word "shell", I meant it as a substitute for "body".