Monster

Something I composed today and thought it was funny :)

It’s gaining on me.

I’m running full speed,

But it’s speeding up,

Or I’m slowing down.

 

I hear my own heart,

And feel my pulse jump.

My feet thud against the treadmill

It’s going to catch me.

 

It’ll slowly creep up my thigh,

Wrap itself around my waist,

Absorb my face,

And engulf me completely.

 

Some will pity me,

Others will laugh.

Some will just be glad they’re not alone,

Misery loves company.

 

But I won’t bear it,

So I keep running full speed,

Knowing that the very fear of it,

Will be my demise.

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

Awesome, this could symbolize alot of things other than the fear of not losing weight. You put this in an exciting brief adventure far and away from idollness and lazery. Bravo!

-youoweyoupay

[Sweets]

This is great!
Nicely done!

[momo]

..what is it? is it the langoliers? i must know..

[C. Rose]

This really captured me. Sharing that battle with fear, it's works like this help us all know that we can battle. I also like there is a subtle sarcasm to your words in this, I don't know how strong your intention is there or it may just be me reading it with my own layers of sarcasm. It really does allow for a connection for the reader on their personal battle. Much enjoyed!

[kuru]

this was very creative it reminds me of the blob thing ;) lol ...maybe you should put the treadmill part at the end? just my thoughts

[Jonathan De Elvira]

"Some will just be glad they’re not alone,

Misery loves company."..gotta love that line...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Minus the Treadmill....
You succeeded in scaring the hell out of me.

[Jonathan]

Very amusing you almost sold me on the
idea that someone was after you, but when
You said treadmill I could not help myself
but laugh. A entertaining write, I appreciate a
Good laugh :)