Alone.

A piece I wrote in class the other day. Based on some life stuff.

Two people walking alone

One one way

One the other

Slowly approaching one another

 

The girl

Wind whipping through

Her long curly hair and woven cloth

Messing it

But she doesn't care

 

She's alone

Looking for a kindren soul

Walking in the night

Her bare feet padding softly

On the concrete

 

The boy

A troubled face

Looking down at the ground

His unnaturally shelled feet

Pound upon

 

He's alone

His back laden with scholarly burdens

Walking back home

To continue working

To continue dying

 

She looks up

Eyes heavy with question

But- in fear of rejection

She looks away- down

Examining her bare red toenails

 

He walks by

Wanting to stay alone

No- thinking that's what he wants

Head down

He ignores her

 

She takes a few more steps

Then stops- turns

He's now a speck in the distance

His troubles do not parallel hers

She walks back into the wind

 

One person walking alone

Going where her feet will take her

Knowing she must think and live and walk

Alone.

Reviews

[B]

Bravo
Really well done
I can honestly i truly know what each line resembles
at least to me

[Layla J Omorose]

this is a very sad poem though I did enjoy reading it. It held me in suspense to see if the two of them would meet each other and then they wont have to walk alone but they didn't. It symoblizes not only are there some things or burdens on life that we must deal with alone but also that our lives are lived in a sense alone because of our own experiences. In a way we are forever alone. Good writing.