A Poem by JR Darewood

I walk alone to the beat of my heart
  while the rest of you dance
sweaty, hips grinding to a rhythm i cannot hear
  watching me like ghosts
  phantasms of faces
  ethereal and formless 
  like zephyrs in the rain
I don't feel the drops 
  don't feel your gaze 
  don't hear your voice...
because that dull ache eclipses it all
  leaden in my heart
    it hurts.
But the only moment that i am me,
is when you all disappear.

© 2013 JR Darewood

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amazingly written keep it up !!

Posted 7 Years Ago

You can't help but feel it. Bravo.....................

Posted 8 Years Ago

Somber, sad, and relatable. Makes me think of my own depressive days. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago

Wow this smacks you in the face and flips you over...felt it's chill, and I so get it....

Posted 9 Years Ago

Great work on this one, J. The last two lines are particularly resonant- a perfect end to a very good poem. Nicely done!

Posted 9 Years Ago

like zephyrs in the rain

LOVE that line

sometimes we need to be alone

even if momentarily

"to feel that moment of clarity"

Posted 9 Years Ago

Nice poem. I like that you are highlighting the conflict between your social identity and your personal identity. And then you say "the moment you all disappear I am me." Why do you think the personal identity is more authentic? Is it due to the lack of social constraints that are imposed by the public?

Posted 9 Years Ago

Yeah, I can feel this one on most nights. I have a love-hate relationship with being alone, but a mostly hate relationship with being in a crowd.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on December 4, 2013
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JR Darewood
JR Darewood

Los Angeles, CA

Writing is really the greatest release. It teaches you to take notice of the depth of the world around you and channel it into new insights you want to share with the world. I love it. BTW: I turne.. more..


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