A Good Man

Day in, day out, day over... I have so much love. Life is good.

The scattered

of the concrete jungle

Tear at my Armani.

 

 

I am a conqueror

A warrior champion. 

 

 

Frantic into the deep

tracking prey

Elusive, cunning, deadly

 

I am a man of action

A hunter gatherer.

 

 

Dragged into the abyss

the fight for life

Allowing myself to die to live

 

I am father-husband.

Reviews

[ElJays Nicholas]

Hi Jodie :) Sometimes the fewest words speak the loudest and the strongest. Positive use of the I AM consciousness. You have two voices going here, two poems intertwined nicely. If you take the I AM lines and make them a single poem, it speaks of a higher self. If you take the lines which are not in italics, then it speaks a of a lower self taking action in the world, that survival voice. Both voices are powerful and come together in the final line, I am father-husband, a statement which says...I am complete only with the other. Excellent poem....

[James K. Blaylock]

Breathtaking!

jkb

[she makes me weird]

I love this piece! It's short but says so much. "dying to live" - this concept is amazing to me. I get the thought of letting your own desires die to live and compromise with the one you want to live with. I love how you talk about being a warrior - and at the end, you're a husband and father. Simply magnificent.

[Lalli]

the man, the myth, the Jodie! lol...

I found it rather enjoyable to see the difference of having the description coming before the revealing of the statement. Cleverly and creatively constructed. you took the iidea of being a father and a husband, tied them together and brough them to light defined in a unique manner within this poem. Great job brotha,

Isn't that the battle as a writer, to write on a concept written upon more times that countable, but to make it shine uniquely in a creative way of our own?!..

much love n respect

-Lalli

[Melissa]

You know what I truly appreciated about this piece of poetry, was the imagery of words I can relate to. "concrete jungle" I lived in the city of Arlington, Texas for many years and dealt with that hot concrete world. Great reference to the city there. I loved this line

"The scattered

of the concrete jungle

Tear at my Armani."

Wonderful imagery and relatable.

[Yvonne Heidt]

I loved this. How many people really know who they are? Very bold statements, no wasted words at all.
Thank you for sharing it!

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