Lottie

I shall fall,
when you are by my side...
                               So please, dear emotions
                                                    stay motionless.

Tainting her would be sinful.
                            For she's a purist.

Doves replaced by crows.
roses thorns,
and dawn dusk.

                        Love be foul
                             if returned...

Reviews

[I-smile]

"Tainting her would be sinful.
For she's a purist."
you funny innocent idiot. HAHAHA. =)

i...like the third phrase...
it somehow brings out that..agony/sadness..

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This was fun to read, even though the content of this is somewhat sad. And the colors you use does make a difference this poem, at least to me it does. Colors are very helpful in expressing an emotion; red and black to me symbolize the emotion you are trying to get through in this poem. I really liked the entire piece, so thanks for the read! :D

[An owl on the moon]

What a wondrous twisting of words and thoughts. You take us on a journey into the heart.. longing yet distant.. The comparisons and contrasts blend into the colors of the lettering to create a stunning work.

[Keriun]

I love this :D

[Michael X]

this is classic romance. the flow is a depiction of those poet's of olde'
you've created a powerful sense of longing and despair, excellent job.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. Each line making the story stronger and fun to read. I like the flow and the ending. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote