Pash

Pash

A Poem by Mrudula Rani

The excess lipstick,
A blotted kiss on tissue.
He pockets with care.

© 2019 Mrudula Rani


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I just read your response to Jacob below. I don’t often say this, but that is quite romantic when read in the context of your poem. It is easy to be full of feeling in a budding relationship, but long term relationships definitely transform the way we see one another and our concept of access to the person.

It’s a lovely thought this early morning. I love the way your poem starts a scene and then lets readers fill in the details. Great visual and emotional appeal packed into this one, Mrudula.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

I usually get ride of these tissues from his pockets regularly, but there is one in his wallet, with.. read more



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oh lovely...such a passionate memory lifetime...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much.
What a wonderful senryu! You never fail to hit home with a specific cause in mind: in this case, given warmth with enduring magic. May I wrap your language around me for a while.. please. Is that a nod I see beforre me.. .. ?

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

I send you the abrações muito carinhoso para te( the most love filled hugs to you dear) thank yo.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Always my pleasure.. truly.
oh goodness I got nervous i thought that was referring to breast cancer for a second... oh never mind that's benign i didn't know what the other pash meant oh that's sad... what a jerk!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Calm down, no harm done.... take a deep breath. Inhale 1,2, 3... now exhale 1,2,3,4,5. Esta melhor?
Robert Trakofler

1 Year Ago

contanto que o seu bem dear Mrudula:)
Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Aqui está tudo ótimo. Muito obrigada. Uma abraço, querido Robert.
Very sharp edged, but sweet senryu.
It's been a while since I've read/ heard the term Pash.
Excellent!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Thank you, for your very kind review.
i love it ...emotive and relatable ... and romantic ;) had to look up "pash" .. well done Mrudi!
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, E. I appreciate very much.
Superb Mrudula, so much emotion and imagery contained here. If that is your man that has saved your blotted kiss, then you have one in a million my friend. You knew that already didn't you? A gem.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Thank you Chris for your marvelous understanding of a relationship, I have known him since I was 18 .. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Year Ago

And you too my friend:)
This lovely senyru perfectly captures obsession and perhaps adoration which may be healthy or unhealthy dependant upon the circumstances.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

I sometimes wonder that myself... thank you John, for putting a huge smile on my Saturday.
I just read your response to Jacob below. I don’t often say this, but that is quite romantic when read in the context of your poem. It is easy to be full of feeling in a budding relationship, but long term relationships definitely transform the way we see one another and our concept of access to the person.

It’s a lovely thought this early morning. I love the way your poem starts a scene and then lets readers fill in the details. Great visual and emotional appeal packed into this one, Mrudula.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

I usually get ride of these tissues from his pockets regularly, but there is one in his wallet, with.. read more
Oh! this conjures up all sorts of different scenarios, though that may just be me.
But the lips of a woman in print can be very erotic and foreboding.
Three killer lines, Mrudula. Sensual as hell, love it.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Thank you Paul, glad to be impressing you, one of the best( my favorite) writers on Writerscafe.
Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

This is a great example to writers. You don't always need thirty lines to get the message through. T.. read more

this has got the lot.. but sensuality and passion, stand out in particular.. as does human behaviour and particularly that of lovers.. if I could give ya more than top marks.. I would hand them over freely and unconditionally..... Neville

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

1 Year Ago

guess we are both smilin big :)
Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

Obrigada para tudo. Uma abraço.
Neville

1 Year Ago

A big one for you too :)

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Added on July 25, 2019
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