OWN MAN

OWN MAN

A Poem by M.Babu
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Different, but alluring.

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He liked his eggs poached,

Cooked for exactly two minutes.

His coffee was always dark,

Steaming and sugarless.

He combed his hair forwards,

Tucked his shirt off reflex.

The hem of his trousers,

Just brushed his shoes.

Large circular rimmed spectacles,

Obsessively white teeth.

Shaved moustache,

Millimeter long nails.

Plain black socks,

Leather shoes to match.

Twenty minutes early,

Always staring at his watch.

English as impeccable

As his style.

Hearty laughter

Unlike his eyes.

Perfection a line he trudged,

Respect a moral he bestowed.

Lonely, he was always described.

But it didn’t seem to matter.

~M.Babu~

© 2016 M.Babu


Author's Note

M.Babu
Tuxedo Mask by Lauren Montgomery

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What a fantastic exercise in detailed description, not only can I envision him but I can imagine the sound of his voice and mannerism's all from the power of your words alone. High kicks not outside his character, tuxedo mask style :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 4 Years Ago


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M.Babu

4 Years Ago

An innate need for validation is a writer's vice, I presume! I prefer the speechless alternative tho.. read more



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I definitely agree with a review below; from your description of this man I can see him standing before me and I can see him through the blur of the crowd. I can imagine his voice, his laughter and his body language as he speaks or as he stands still, waiting.

He does seem lonely but maybe that is because he's living a lie and his true colors are hidden underneath all of the perfectionism that is radiating from his appearance...

Posted 4 Years Ago


M.Babu

4 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch for the review Daisy!
I'm so happy that something of that magnitude could ech.. read more
Daisy Moon

4 Years Ago

I love you.
I really like this. I hope this man cal let got of his ocd and enjoy life just a little maybe then he wouldn't be so lonely.

Posted 4 Years Ago


M.Babu

4 Years Ago

I hope someone will eventually love him for all his quirks!
I'm glad you gave it a read! Many.. read more
Rachael Lea

4 Years Ago

Hope is something nobody must loose ever! I hope that is possible, the only reason I mentioned it th.. read more
M.Babu

4 Years Ago

You've actually delved into the heart of this piece, Rachel. I think I wanted him to be immovable, s.. read more
This reeked of English class snobbery on a first glance, everything so particular in place! A clever amusing piece! have you been stalking me!! lol

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

'Perfection a line he trudged'

Perfectly versed - the fault lines in the impeccable personality cracked open!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love the message! Very thought provoking!

Posted 4 Years Ago


M.Babu

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading sir!
~M.Babu~
Tariq Muhammad

4 Years Ago

My pleasure!

A very intriguing write and wonderful descriptions. Striking imagery and detail add to the atmosphere and as the character is developed the reader is drawn into his world.A great write

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M.Babu

4 Years Ago

Glad you took the time to read it John. Thanks!
~M.Babu~
Absolutely amazing description! you could totally write fiction novels and I believe they would be amazing! a very different poem and a very clever one! keep writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M.Babu

4 Years Ago

You're very kind Abeer! Thanks for your extremely humbling review!
~M.Babu~
I liked this poem. Great description create interesting character and life. I did like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M.Babu

4 Years Ago

Coyote, many thanks!
~M.Babu~
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome.
What a fantastic exercise in detailed description, not only can I envision him but I can imagine the sound of his voice and mannerism's all from the power of your words alone. High kicks not outside his character, tuxedo mask style :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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M.Babu

4 Years Ago

An innate need for validation is a writer's vice, I presume! I prefer the speechless alternative tho.. read more
A portrait of a man ... a natural dignity ... and the treasure of a wondrous creation. Sometimes we need to simply sit still awhile to enjoy it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


M.Babu

4 Years Ago

Indeed we are a creation of seemingly random circumstances - the beauty of humanity is intensely ove.. read more

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