LIFE's RING

Step into the Ring...what's YOUR approach?

When you stepped into his ring,

At a tender young age.

He babied you abit,

Like a newly crowned king,

Trained you up well,

To cover all your bases.

Defend yourself from,

Your peers’ overwhelming graces.

 

He taught you

To bounce back,

When you were punched

onto the ropes.

How to parry your way

Through it

How to rebuild on

your hopes.

 

Then you got seedy,

thought you owned Life’s Ring.

Knocked out several of His students

With your surfeit greed. 

You challenged your Master,

With a wager to secede.

He looked down for a moment,

Before he sighed ‘indeed’.

 

Life was fast

and robust,

He ducked your rights,

With deadly speed.

Dodged your lefts

with precise ease

And delivered his own

accurately.

 

Sweat dripping down your brow,

You can barely stand up.

Cuts countless on your face,

Tasting blood in your mouth.

Yet here Life comes again

His gloves poised in bout,

Your vision goes black as

You’re viciously knocked out!

 

Author's Note

I think i underdeveloped what this piece could have been. Your additions/subtractions/thoughts/distastes are highly welcome:)

Reviews

[Judy Ponceby]

Fascinating metaphor for life. Overall I feel this is very well done. I think you could have expanded a bit more on the theme. Most of this flows beautifully, nice rhythm. This stanza I stumbled a bit through,


He taught you
To bounce back,
When you were punched
onto the ropes.
How to parry your way
Through it
How to rebuild on
your hopes.

I like the images, but I think given the quality of the other stanzas perhaps this deserves a little editing.

I am enjoying your work, keep it up :)

[Murtuza]

Superb imagery! Good work :)

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

Well my friend as always you fail to dissapoint with your amazing work
Keep it up

[Skoo.]

I absolutely love this!
I really like the way it switches between stanzas with long lines and stanzas with short lines (: And I love the ideas behind it.
I'm definitely libraryifying this one d:

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

I like how you interact the art of boxing with life, Death is the ultimate victor who vanquishes life at every turn. We can never win the fight no matter how much we train. Great poem and a favourite.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Interesting write..Life can offer out so really tough lessons and if we want to learn we can benefit from them..Some never learn..The print could have been larger for people of my age could see it better...Sunflower

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

not a huge fan of wrestling :') but the way the poem is presented is very good :)