LOST IN THE MOMENT

LOST IN THE MOMENT

A Poem by M.Babu
"

I’m staring at the stairs, you’re descending.

"

The piano lulling.

The ship swaying.

A soft breeze whistling.

The crimson sun setting.

I’m staring.

At the stairs,

You’re descending.

Your black hair, flowing.

Your red dress fluttering…

In your wake.

You’re stunning.

You look gorgeous.

Just smiling.

Glancing…

Across the room. Searching.

Our eyes lock…momentarily.

The piano keys, urging.

Egging us on.

The hold overpowering,

Our senses.

Intellect…shattering.

Your full lips, almost calling.

My name.

 

In my tux,

My pulse is racing.

My anticipation, rising.

As you start walking.

Gracefully…

Almost gliding.

The crowd around us, chattering.

I can’t hear them…

Our hands meet…playfully.

We’re dancing.

Across the floor…strutting.

Your beautiful skin, distracting…

Your scent, confusing…

Your gaze unfaltering.

Our rhythm, synchronizing.

The pace, proliferating.

The crowd, watching.

Us, rotating…

Smoothly, dancing.

You shut your eyes,

Beaming.

I shut mine too then…

Tapping.

On my shoulder.

 

Your fiancé,

Grinning.

You two, hugging.

Embracing…

The love between you-

Oozing.

Effortlessly.

I’m a third wheel.

Bowing…

I take my leave.

Envying,

My best friend.

You’re both,

Laughing.

The music, culminating.

The crowd, clapping.

I join in too.

Now,

You’re both, whispering.

 

I’m staring.

At the stairs,

You’re ascending.

Your black hair, flowing.

Your red dress fluttering…

In your wake.

You’re stunning.

And I’m a fool…

Lost in the Moment.

 

~M.Babu

© 2011 M.Babu


Author's Note

M.Babu
I don’t normally write this way, but I was in some trance (listening to Bob Acri) when I wrote this. It really hurts liking something you know you can’t have. Feelings don’t go away and living in the moment sometimes feels like the only option.

Please let me know what you think…Thanks.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

This is such a great poem. It was extremely easy to visualize, almost like a movie in my head, or like a music video possibly. But you did a good job of making your audience (me) connect with your character in such a short amount of time. By the end, when we discovered she was engaged, I wanted it not to be true, for her to be with you. And it made me feel for you. So overall, a fantastic piece of writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

Lovely and touching are the words..It was so beautiful,cant be sure if my words can express it.But let me try..your each object (noun) followed by an adjective/verb adding more details to it,added a grand flavor and created a visual enchantment eg- piano "lulling.", ship "swaying." created a live movie almost.You know,when you love someone and cant get him,its like the whole life gone astray.Really I connected with the write...splendid...loved each and every word!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is such a great poem. It was extremely easy to visualize, almost like a movie in my head, or like a music video possibly. But you did a good job of making your audience (me) connect with your character in such a short amount of time. By the end, when we discovered she was engaged, I wanted it not to be true, for her to be with you. And it made me feel for you. So overall, a fantastic piece of writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful

Posted 9 Years Ago


hehehe, sisemi kitu...this poem dragged me into a trance. unlike your usual writing, yes but this is one of those instances when change is a good thing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


WOW!

Posted 9 Years Ago


You have a smart and romantic style here
wonderful to read, yes a magic touch!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like it a lot :)
Nice write!
Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing!

~A Fallen Heroine~

Posted 9 Years Ago


A strong poem. I like the description and story in your words. Sometime other people happiness make us wish for a better ending for us. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


beautiful piece. I like short phrases because they are quick and to the point. You weave a wonderful story here. In the beginning it made me think of the movie Titanic. It's sad but a nice tale that happens often- the love triangle.

Posted 9 Years Ago


you've touched upon a moment in time which most of us have had to suffer, and in deliciously clever fashion. i don't know why, but the tune "lady in red" came to mind. great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago



First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe

Advertise Here
Want to advertise here? Get started for as little as $5

Stats

917 Views
18 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 2 Libraries
Added on May 27, 2011
Last Updated on May 27, 2011
Tags: Obsession, Guilt, Envy, Love

Author

M.Babu
M.Babu

Nairobi, Kenya



About
To escape, to discover, to entertain. more..

Writing
POET'S WRATH POET'S WRATH

A Poem by M.Babu


ODE TO BROS ODE TO BROS

A Poem by M.Babu


WORD CRUMBS WORD CRUMBS

A Poem by M.Babu



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..