Hungry for love

Tear my heart out!

Rip it to shreads!

 

I'm hungry for love!

I need to be fed!

 

Fed me a tear!

A hug or two?

 

When your hungry for love

There's nothing you could do!

 

Im Hungry for love.

Fed me please!

 

Looking for a heart.

That needs me!

 

Give me your heart!

I'll give you my hand!

 

Don't let go!

And still I stand!

 

My stomach still hurts.

I'm starving too death!

 

I need someone to love !

Before My last Breath!

 

As you came and holded me.

You let me Know!

 

My hungriness for love.

Was sure too go!!

Reviews

[BLACK PRINCE]

A poem straight from the heart

[Sir Chris]

Please take my heart dear! Ur poem is gud but u can do better than this.

[nigrum homonculus]

again an honest poem, i'll stay true to my last review. for your age your writing is excellent and i think you csn only improve with age. keep at it!

[ChaoticSoul]

Like I said in my last review, just work on your grammar a bit and your work will be really great :) you have a clear sense of what emotions to write about for being so young and your writing is only going to get better and better from here on! Keep writing!

[Khal Attero]

Really catchy and generic, but still good. For a thirteen-year old, your writing is excellent. But, as I said before in one of your poems, Im not really into love poems that much.

[Chip]

I know the feeling you said it so well within this poem! Great work!

As for mistakes stomache should be stomach. Befor should be Before. Dont should be Don't. Im should be I'm.