My Nymphetamine Girl

This is based off a song by Craddle of Filth.

Why do you seem so lonely,
My nymphetamine girl?
I want to cast my presence upon you,
And cure your lonely.
You are so wild like fire.
But I can’t help but kiss the flame,
And burn thy lips upon such a pleasure.

Oh my sweet nymphetamine girl.
How I do love thee.
Raining your soft tears of passion,
As I fulfill your ever growing need.
Let thy finger tips brush your rose petal skin.
And thy heart beat strong,
As I caress your soul.

How may I serve you,
My lovely nymphetamine girl?
Your addiction grows alongside mine.
But your drug is purely tangible,
Where mine is surreal.
I'd do anything to please you.
Even though you need just one thing.

My poor nymphetamine girl.
Such a slave to your hungry desires.
I may love thee but pity is true.
Without such essence,
You're a fire with no fuel.
Your petals wither away,
Until my body is yours again the next day.

My sweet, lovely, poor nymphetamine girl.

 

Author's Note

I was sooooooo happy when I rememebered that I had saved this poem on my myspace. whoo. I thought it was gone forever.

Reviews

[Kiri J]

mmm this is good. nympthetamine is such a good word.

(just a query though... "As I cores your soul." is that word supposed to be caress?

My lovely nymphetamine girl?

Your addiction grows alongside mine.

But your drug is purely tangible,

Where mine is surreal.

i love that.

great write.

K

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is fantastic. i adore it. the flow is great, the word choices are excellent. overall a wonderful piece. no wonder you were thrilled to have it survive the fire!! i would be proud of this piece, too!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Well penned! I am glad that this piece was not lost in the mayhem of the WC destruction.

-Gabe

[B O]

Very tender and understanding piece. I like it a lot. Thanks!

[George Love]

Very vivid imagination, clear imagery and nicely done.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I really enjoyed this it is well written and clear. I loved the word nyphetamine, especially after reading your notes sex like a drug. What a sweet drug. Good work.

[Jim Bob]

I'd like to see you maintain some consistency with your use of thee/you, as I think that is pretty important and will add to the overall effect of the piece. It can seem like two languages are being used in places. maybe that's a pet peeve, but overall, I think the poem is pretty good. Thanks for sharing!

[Marie]

Nicely done.

[Kenji Light]

I like the imagery in this piece but I still don't like the use of old English language. The language of the ancients is a dead one. I don't think it really adds to this piece. It makes it seem a lot older than it really is and considering the modern references to Cradle of Filth it seems very out of place to use the thee's and thy's.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Love the song ... six feet deep is this incision.. love when he sings that.. as for your poem.. i like it too.
I how may i serve you, that verse. so sorry this is a mixed up review.. got a little one i have to hurry .. be back lol

xoxo

[cory]

I love this and I love cradle of filth. Ive been into cradle of filth sense day 1 i know what the your talking about, you should read some of my s**t to.


Great poem.