Animals

We're just a couple animals

You felt sick the first time that you saw me
After all these years apart
As if I'd stabbed you through the heart
Your pain was clearly painted on your face

We should despise one another,

I felt sick the first time that I saw you
After so many years alone
Proving that it had not turned to stone
My heart ached to see you within my reach

for the pain we've caused all these years

You barely choked out a panicked hello
Before whispering if I hated you
Questioning like you didn't have a clue
Dark sepia eyes smouldering my soul

and dragging others into the darkness with us.

I barely managed to force out a steady hi
Before shaking my head with a rebellious smile
I asked if you could bear to stay awhile
How badly I'd yearned for those burning eyes

Our verboten relationship caused so many tears.

You gave an apologetic smile
As you said quietly that would be sublime
But that you weren't going to jail a second time
The fear was apparent behind those eyes

Though somehow somewhere along this troubled path

I tried to give an understanding smile
As I hoped the branches could mend after the fire
For some reason I'm still burned with desire
Even after all the suffering you've cause me

we realized we'd love each other once this smoke clears.

Author's Note

I really like putting poems in poems.

Reviews

[i.am.the.sun.]

love the back and forth of this, your poems can be read multiple times and not just interpreted differently each time, but you can choose to read it in a different order too, and it still works! i dont know how you do it, but it's awesome :) keep it up

[briannachristine]

I love this style! You've encouraged me to play with the structure in my writing! The back and forth of two perspectives within one event is a fantastic way to engage and the main poem woven throughout - excellent! I really enjoyed the emotions you played with. I want to know more about those story! I hope you write more or add to this one! I'm intrigued!

[John Stussy]

You're great at the style of writing, makes for an energetic telling of the stories your poems relate. Keep up the awesome work, I look forward to reading more awesome poetry from you.

[Brianna Brie]

I enjoyed reading this poem. It is full of passion.