Innocent Temptations.

Innocent Temptations.

A Poem by Natasha
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Are we growing up or just going down?

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In this closet we share
This pitch black blanket
Hides only our desperation
 
These hands groping, caressing
As our lips lock between gasps of air
I’m crying, I’m panting, I’m stroking
 
Sounds of intimacy, growing and growing
The threat of an oncoming bomb evident
That blind ‘I love you’ stumbling inside
 
            I stop, you stop and we stare at one another
            You notice my tears, I notice your pain
            Trembling lips whispering out doubts
 
Taking back your hands you sigh
Taking back control you let go
Taking back time you explain
 
            To hear your worries
            To hear your truth
            It is what I want
 
In this closet: we are hiding
In this darkness: we are safe
In this moment: we are at peace

© 2009 Natasha


Author's Note

Natasha
I wanna scream I love you at the top of my lungs but I'm afraid that someone else will hear me

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I like the fact that you pulled this poem back from the edge...from the rush of passion to something more meaningful. Nice writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


T his was beautiful and passionate, your emotions came through clearly. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I absolutely loved this.

The repetition was very well done, and the imagery was superb. I could really feel the emotion, and tension coming out of it.

Well done!
=]

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow. natasha, such a painted depiction of desirous affection, your talent certainly filled the cup with
skillful, overflowing emotions that cant help but capture the reader in the moment.
I loved this writing, its poetry written to height, where art and insight collide as an explosion
of expression with fine, sincere, and touching detail, I loved this, I agree, Bravo!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great Natasha!! I loved your descriptions and passion. It's so emotional. So vivid.
I love this piece! It's my favorite from you!
I'm snapping my fingers in applause!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I think this is my favorite poem of yours. ^^

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Clever use of parallelism in that last two non-indented stanzas.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm assuming this has at least something to do with your dream?
Well, I must say.
I love this.
The repetition is really effective.
I really love the trios of lines (or triplets?)
lmao
No, but excellent job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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