Dead-Alive

DEAD-ALIVE

One day, I would be on the ground,

Like a faded fallen leaf,

I would be buried,

Bringing an end to all my griefs.

I feel sorrowful,

When I would leave all my loved ones,

I would be gone,

Leaving them in woe and tears.

Will they miss me then?

Will they know my value?

Will they realise I was good?

Or will they forget me saying I am gone.

It's an eternal truth,

Death is what will part us,

I cannot even hide my tears from myself,

I am alive today,

But being away from you is death itself.

Reviews

[fadingtale]

Great job! I love the metaphor you used about faded leaf and death, but relating this about life and love. Thank you for submitting for all about love contest!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am truly happy to know that you liked this.

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

A poem about death has never been so beautiful. Your metaphor about the faded leaf being buried made for great imagery. Another great poem!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :) Feeling truly very happy to know that you liked it.

[APOORVA]

melancholy of this poem reaches its readers.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad I was able to do so. Thank you for reading :)

[Lovecraft]

Very good. The title reminded me of the movie Dead-Alive directed by Peter Jackson. A very violent but funny as hell zombie movie, lol.

I enjoyed the darkly sad nature of this poem.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[Sir_Anonymous]

Another good read you have a great talent for wordplay In how you make most rhymes hold a significance.

I am not fond of thinking on my inevitable end however that does not mean I don't.

Sometimes I'm just staring at the ceiling and think "I'm going to be gone one day... Will anyone cry, will anyone remember me?"

I have written on the topic of death and life being finite before as well and I feel the more I write about it the more accepting I am about the thing all people share.

Sincerely, Sir_Anonymous

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Well written saher...from the top to bottom I loved it😉

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[Shiny]

One day, I would be on the ground,
Like a faded fallen leaf,
I would be buried,
Bringing an end to all my griefs.
I feel sorrowful,
When I would leave all my loved ones,
I would be gone,
Leaving them in woe and tears.

love these above lines...very true words...
Heart felt and good write

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[Njeri Brooks]

Very compassionate poem once again!
This poem feels as if it's speaking on the topic of suicide, and it really correlates with both the fears and wonders of death.

~~N. Brooks

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :) I wrote this today after watching the faded leaves on the ground.

[Njeri Brooks]

That's really interesting. Isn't it amazing how even the simplest things can influence us to write our own depiction and representation?

Sometimes, I'm really amazed at the things that inspire people.

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah that's true. I also wanted to express the fallen leaf a metaphor for ignorance. But I couldn't.

[Valentine]

What got me in this is your last line. It gave me many thoughts of missing those I have see depart this earth. Nice write. Valentine

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)