Paper boat

Personification

PAPER BOAT

Setting out for a journey,

Long way I have to go.

For I am a paper boat,

Floating in the stream of darkness.

Eager and curious for the destiny to unfold,

I am all stiff in pride,

For I am a paper boat,

I am setting out for a ride.

Cold wind pushes me hard to move forward,

And I wait for someone to notice me,

I feel like I am invisible,

Only this stream around me I see.

Drenched in my own feelings,

I float along the stream,

Trembling and falling but I move along with the wind.

The words in me are fading,

For it is a message to the one who notice me,

Gliding across the way,

I was unnoticed but existed among them.

My pride is gone,

I am no more stiff,

I am dripping wet and the rain drowns me,

Finally, I am noticed after a long journey.

But when I am picked up to read,

My words are blurred and I am not what I used to be.

I am now a mere piece of paper,

Drenched in the rain and utterly useless,

I am torn and ruined being all by myself. 

I lay down there thinking,

When I was in my true form I had no one to notice,

When I am at my worst I am blamed and lying unnoticed.

Reviews

[Suhd]

Nice work Najamus Saher !

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading...☺

[pia]

This was the cutest yet meaningful poem ive ever read !!!!!
I loved the symbolism and the words uve used here
Amazing !!

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you so much....I am glad that you found it to be meaningful and amazing....☺

[L.C. Jarrette]

When I was in my true form I had no one to notice,
When I am at my worst I am blamed and lying unnoticed


=> i like your poem..

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much....I am really very happy to know that you liked it :)

[Roch Ketchum]

Great Great Great.

Amazing job

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you so much....I am really happy to know that you liked this....☺

[Roch Ketchum]

My pleasure friend :)

[Hasventhran Baskaran]

Nobody notices when we are being good, but they are quick to comment when we have any flaws. A very beautiful poem from you again.Keep it up

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really widely elated to know that you liked it...Thank you so much... ☺

[Hasventhran Baskaran]

You are welcome 😊

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

such a unique writing style and beautiful poem... you have my full support, keep on writing

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you so much...you made me very happy....Thank you so much for your kind words... ☺

[wordman]

a journey indeed,loved it

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much...I am glad that you loved it... ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

A realistic journey in your words. Life teaches us many lessons. I believe we gained great wisdom when we learn. We decided our places and our ending/beginnings. Thank you Najam for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you so much for reading... ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Abraham George]

Journey of Paper Boat , so amazing imagination how to relate this to our life

brilliant work my friend. keep going

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much....I am really happy to know that you liked this... ☺

[Joey Nizz]

Wow Najam, this is really amazing work!
I loved how you resembled a paper boats journey to a real one.

Thanks for sharing,

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you so much for reading....I am glad to know that you liked it....☺

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)