Sometimes

SOMETIMES

Sometimes we let go the things we love,

We make mistakes, we fall, we lie above.

Sometimes we try hard to make life perfect,

We realise, we apologize; after we regret.

Sometimes we feel life will fall into place,

We try harder than we could, just to catch the pace.

Sometimes we are helpless and tired of trying,

We sit back and hope, life will be worth living before dying.

Sometimes we smile when we are dead inside,

We force it, which leads to a misguide.

Sometimes we are fed up and want all this to end,

We break the barriers and become weak to bear life's bend.

Sometimes we want things so badly,

We make an effort to achieve it exactly.

Sometimes we are left with unaccomplished dreams,

We lay emotionless in tears with silent screams.

Reviews

[Vicky]

"We sit back and hope life will be worth living before dying."
That line deeply connected with me. Excellent.
And actually upon reading it a second time the whole thing is quite good. My thoughts, if not put so eloquently, exactly.

[Najam Us Saher]

I hope you feel better soon. Thank you so much for reading. I am glad that you found something you could relate and feel solaced by reading it, it feels good to read what you feel.

[Madhav Rathi]

Sometimes, just sometimes, words express it all what we feel. Beautifully written bud!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read this. :)

[Ardra]

Sometimes we smile when we are dead inside..

nicely done Najam

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much. :)

[AKhaus]

Love the last line, and I've been there plenty a time

[Najam Us Saher]

That's sad to know.
Thank you very much for reading.

[Surya]

So true.....
Aches of pain in it..
I loved it...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much, good to see you :)

[Surya]

A pleasure always...l'll busy these days but back again...:)

[William Liston]

If anything is true about your work, Najam, it's that your poetry is always heartfelt, sincere, and written in such a way which anyone can read, relate, and find emotional relief - this piece is no exception. Along with the spot-on rhymes throughout, this piece is admirable in its message, maturity, and emotional depth. I enjoyed the repetition of "sometimes" throughout in how it moved the piece forward, thus enhancing your theme.

The feel of this piece reminded me of the first stanza of "My Bouquet" by Floria Kelderhouse:

Some days I sing, some days I cry.
My soul's the one determines why.
Sometimes it laughs, sometimes it scorns.
On my bouquet, are many thorns.


Thank you for sharing!

- William Liston

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem, I feel honored to read your kind words.
read moreThank you so much for taking the time to read my poem, I feel honored to read your kind words.
The lines you quoted from the poem are really very deep, I will read the entire poem soon.
I can't thank you enough, it really means a lot.

[Anjali]

You never seem to disappoint, like you are so good at this. Do you even get writer's block? I mean, you're perfect at this. Beautiful! This piece holds truth in it, and that's it's best part! Amazing, keep writing!

[Najam Us Saher]

Hahaa...I am not afraid of writer's block, I am afraid of a day when I would completely stop writing.
Thank you very much for reading, it means a lot...

[Anjali]

Oh..... I feel you. But please don't ever stop writing!

[Muneeb khan]

We sit back and hope life would be worth living before dying.....
This line is more than enough

[Najam Us Saher]

You caught that feeling exactly. Thank you very much for reading, I appreciate it :)

[Joey Nizz]

Sometimes letting go can be the hardest thing and sometimes it can be the best thing..

Well wrote Najam, this was an excellent write :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Well said, I agree with you. Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poems. ☺

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome Najam, its always a pleasure ^^

[Harley Quinn]

I think a lot of people could relate to this. Very strong and creative writing. Bravo.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am widely elated to hear that. Thank you so much. ☺