Someone Else

Someone Else

A Poem by Naomi
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A poem about a girl trying to escape a strict society.

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Strict and controlled -- A follower at heart.
No one listened to her from the start.
Pushed and pried, open your eyes.
She's the only real person in sight.
Pained and depressed, she ran from distress,
leaving behind this old world.
She ran away, her own decision,
leaving her footprints for you to find.
Free and awake, not had a bad day,
she held a bright smile on her face.
How could she know?
How could she have hidden?
The wardens came after her.
They put her in her place, charged with disgrace.
She wanted out, longing to be someone else.
Sick of following, sick of order,
she decided to take control.
Lose but awake, she ran away time after time.
She was caught again and again, 
scolded every day of her short life
till finally they took it with a knife...

© 2011 Naomi


Author's Note

Naomi
I wrote this poem over the summer when I was grounded...xD

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very deep and powerful. I know how you feel, it is horible staying in one place to long...

Posted 12 Years Ago


I don't think anyone likes being restricted in any shape or form, dear. This piece portrays how you feel wonderfully. I think every human being can relate to this. I also enjoy the flow of the poem. It's simply wonderful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I'd hate being in a strict society. I'd probably run away too. The girl in this poem is very brave and yeah. Very cool! I like the footprints part a lot. I just feel like it's a really unique addition..
(:

Posted 12 Years Ago


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(GASP!) wow that was messed up at the end. :( at least she'll be free. but wow very emotional poem :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


really nice poem loved the way it flowed

Posted 12 Years Ago


A dark and deeply emotional poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, such a powerful poem, so deep.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A strong poem. I like how you told the story in this poem. Allow the reader to feel the desire to break free then got re-captive. I sad ending to the poem. A knife is a poor way to end the tale. Better to climb the fence and run for open ground. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Deep, some people are too controlling, afraid to lose that controll. This poem is Amazing!!!:)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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