Chaos and champagne

~just a little scribble~

Scattered rhymes would 

fill her poems,

And at times,  they would

resemble assembled

fluff pieces of spring snow, or

maybe you would know

that they were like thrown bridal

confetti coloured

in pink.

Or they would begin

to look like bubbles

bottled in champagne. 

Tottering about,

never settling,

startlingly confused and

over-used.

Would make you muse

on the broader futility

of order.

Author's Note

This one is just a scribble.

Reviews

[Lenah Mehzabin]

well ..this one is making me smile a bit wide ..because i certainty found myself here , it describes a beautiful silly feeling :-) and i like these lines '' Scattered rhymes would
fill her poems,
And at times, they would
resemble assembled'' it made the poem much more pretty as u gave it a nyc start nd i lyk the scribble ..it's something new frm ur collections ,very nyc write :-)

[Moonie]

Oh, thanks babe! You always brighten up my page with your lovely comments! :))

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Aw! thats so sweet .My pleasure ;) . and ur poems are always impressive : )

[Alfred Kukitz]

Bounces with fun with a amusing insight!

Sweet!

Regards,
Al

[Moonie]

Thank you ssok much, Al for visiting this old poem of mine...cheers!

[Lydia Shutter]

Anything and everything can inspire a poem....at times thoughts may scatter, but if they are placed on the page just right, they turn into a worthwhile read.....as this one did. Lydi**

[Moonie]

Very true! Inspiration can strike any time. Chaotic thoughts can be combed finely to produce miraculous ideas. Thank you for the beautiful review, ma'am!!! :))

[ANTO]

Chaos can be the source of such beauty. The dust laden star nurseries, the lava in a flow, fire to name a few. This is deep Naomi and there is a calmness within it like the depths of the sea under choppy seas. It's a great piece of poetry.
:))

[Moonie]

Thank you, Anto. I wanted to illustrate that chaos can be pretty too through this one. The universe is a chaotic mess, but it is still beautiful. I mean Pluto is nosy enough to intrude into Neptune's orbit, and the orbits themselves aren't symmetrical. Gosh, even our bodies and our faces aren't exactly symmetrical. The galaxies are a gigantic chaos. I don't see any order in this world, contrary to what people say. But it is still pretty, isn't it? Order is over rated I say..

[ANTO]

Yeah sure it can - there isnt any order in a snowfall and yet - against the backdrop of a totally black sky, its the most beautiful, mesmerising, hypnotic sight. Theres no order to the surf on the beach I dont think, and yet, the white horses I find totally enchanting. I concur. Order is over rated.
I didnt know that about nosey Pluto (I love that personification of it though lol)

You're very welcome Naomi
:))

[Moonie]

No order in pizza slices too, and they still are a hypnotic sight....lol, I'm rooting for their collision anyway..not the slices, the planets-the nosy one and the awesome one with the trident...

[Moonie]

No order in pizza slices too, and they still are a hypnotic sight....lol, I'm rooting for their collision anyway..not the slices, the planets-the nosy one and the awesome one with the trident...

[ANTO]

yeah - two planets smashing into each other would have no effect on us at all Im sure. ;p

[Moonie]

Yeah, now that I think of it, that really does put an asterisk on the whole collision thingy... :(

[ANTO]

Well hurry up and un-wish it before its too... uh-oh, whats that rumbling noise... N-A-O-M-I !!

[Moonie]

Uh oh, how do I unwish it, do I rub the magic lamp backwards, or do I suck in the air from above a dandelion (that one was lame, I know..)?? Help, the genie isn't coming out..

[ANTO]

say ARBADACARBA !! quickly - *coughs* - those dandelion thingies stick in the throat ...

[Moonie]

While we are at it, we might as well wish for some cough drops too.. bargaining never hurts..

[ANTO]

or some of those face mask thingies - lol
wait a minute - we are UN-WISHING - we cant wish for things when we are unwishing for other things - are you trying to screw up the wish-time-continuum
Ye Gods ! Im shackled to a mad woman
;)

[Moonie]

Oh, you might want to rephrase that, dearie. *sharpens knife*

[ANTO]

(is she still around..?) ... :/

[Moonie]

Lol. Don't worry, you can come out...

[Moonie]

Trying a concrete poem btw. I am starting off using a worm's image though...trying to keep ot simple for now.

[ANTO]

Happy Days - a friend of mines on here (Cambion) had never done one - he tried it and the shape he got was out of this world. He said he created the shape from asterisks then proceeded to replace each line of asteriska with words - heres what he got from using that technique
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Cambion/1469070/

[Moonie]

Aah, sounds like a great idea, and that poem was really brilliant. All I wanted was a cute rounded worm, but now I might try to aim higher. Thank you, Anto!!!!!! :D

[ANTO]

Thank Cambion if you see him.
Good Luck Naomi
;)

[Moonie]

I will!!! :D

[ANTO]

tell him I referred his name as the owner of the Cambion Method lol
xDD

[Moonie]

Cambion Method, eh?? Years later, the generations to come might know the method by this name too.

[ANTO]

You could always improve on it - Idk - maybe use red asterisks? That would make it the Naomi/Cambion method.

[Moonie]

No, that would make it Anto/cambion Method.... sounds pretty good, doesn't it??.:))
Using exclamation marks instead of asterisks can also work though .. I just thanked him for his help, mentioning that name..

The worm poem would have to be a regular one though, the worm figure wasn't looking as impressive as it looks written in simple style... concrete poems are tough...

[ANTO]

Im glad you met the famous and hardly-ever-here Mr C.
He's a good guy.

I think we'll just keep it the Cambion Method - purists that we are.
Im sorry you're finding it tough going
It took me a really long time to construct the number five from words - I sympathise Naomi

[Moonie]

How about the Concrete Cambion Concept?? And who's the lady who try to impress? Cambion??

[Moonie]

Whom you try to impress* --oops!

[ANTO]

The Creative Concrete Cambion Concept - That'll do for the C's then in the challenge - wow - you are working your way through them at a fast snails pace Naomi.

[Moonie]

I did try out the challenge, I reached e I guess, but then the poem was kinda complete... it's 2018 remember? For that date, my speed can be termed as "reasonably" slow. Lol. I do like accepting challenges, it's completing them that is difficult...

[Rita L. Sev]

I love the images this calls to mind - chaos, yes, but such wonderful chaos it is...

[Ana B.]

This is one of my favorites, going to my library.....absoluely could relate to it...the opening lines are just brilliant , and it gets better....thanks for sharing it dear :)

[Moonie]

Oh my god, are you for real??!! :) :) Thank you for such a great review.

[Daydreamer]

I thank you as much for the one you left on my poem🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of thoughts. The short statements create vision and place. I liked the questions in the poetry. Made the poem come to life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Moonie]

Thank you for the kind words, Coyote. It's always nice to read your reviews.:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Bluefire]

It's a rather amazing scribble. Very colorful and thoughtful.
Well done. ^^

[Moonie]

Thanks a lot!!!.. amazing?? I don't know, I do my bit... :) :)
ps, I like the profile photo.. but it's kinda scary...like just a teensy bit...

[Bluefire]

Lol thanks, it is. And this poem is amazing. ^^ You're welcome.

[AprilRN1210]

This is colorful chaos to be sure, bring on the bubbles and confetti!.. let us have a poetic party!.. love your use of language in this one.. oh my goodness what fun!.. well done:)

[Moonie]

Ahhh haaaa, wow! :) Poetic party--yep, why not???:) :) Thank you for leaving such a stellar review! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

A scribble that is jam packed with great elements of alliteration, assonance, consonance, rhythm, meter, visual allusions, descriptive metaphors and other wonderful poetic elements at your disposal. I loved it! I loved especially the descriptive imagery of the bridal thrown confetti and the bubbles of champagne. Thank you for sharing this one. It made me smile...:)

[Moonie]

Oh my god, are you for real??? :) :) you always make me smile...yeah a jam packed chaos of poetic elements...:) :)

[Daydreamer]

Hahahaah a weird kind of amusement reading this one!
Beautiful,special🍷🍷📜📜✏✏

[Moonie]

Correct me if I'm wrong, but are the glasses for champagne, then the thrown confetti and finally the pencils for the poems?? I am very very glad that you found it amusing. Now, now, aren't all my poems weird???

[Moonie]

Lots of love.... :) :)-- ferocious!!

[Daydreamer]

Hahahahahah! Yeah yeah, pretty true! But the bringing about of them all together was 'different' in terms of theme :P I like it this way,though🍷🎊✏
Aw.. I'm flattered😃
Lots more back--Sagacious.

[Moonie]

Haha, I wonder where you find these cute glasses and pencils???!! :))
Long time, no see, hon!!!