Breaking Free

Let go of the past...

A shell surrounds me

And I so want to be free.

 

I am its creator

Which hurts me like the refuse from a reactor.

 

The shell is strong

Making my efforts wrong.

 

Now I have an opportunity

To be the one I want to be in reality.

 

And I will be the one

Spreading warmth like the sun.

Author's Note

Past is Past.
I thank Joey Nizz- my fellow writer, friend, guide- for inspiring me to write this.

Reviews

[Anjali]

Oh well my friend Neetha- here you go I am happy you have understood the significance to let go off the past as holding on for too long will only mean hurting yourself.

Great job and I also appreciate the efforts taken by your friend Joey.

[Tabby Mac]

Beautiful! We can rise from the ashes whether we set the fire or not! We have a choice in the present! Well done!
Tabby

[Zephyr]

I agree with you Tabby:)
Thank you so much!!

[Rubein Geterminah]

Many times we seem barricaded by obstacles that become our moral beasts for excellments
Nevertheless, the speaker finds hope to move on through a break through.

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Rubein:)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Very good, Past is Past it happened, you cried, did mistakes knowingly or unknowingly it doesn't matter,
What matter is who you are today..excellent work

[Zephyr]

I agree :)
Thank you so much Farhan:)

[APOORVA]

Past is Past that should be made peace with and moved on :)
Classy writing.
Immense hold on the flow of emotions in a right way

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Apoorva:)
Glad to read from you:)

[heartspeaks]

first of all the reason i read your poem is because of the title. I have written a poem with exactly the same title.. Gee...
now back to your poem.. its awesom . Shows the vigilant struggle constantly. Keep it up.
No offence but i would suggest a lil improvisation..
Just repeat the first two lines in the end. It will keep the touch of your poem .

[Zephyr]

That's a good idea Heart:)
And it is surely no offence!
Thank you so much dear:)

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

Well done to this one
"I am its creator

Which hurts me like the refuse from a reactor"

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Earth:)

[Psychotic Lily]

"Now I have an opportunity
To be the one I want to be in reality."

This one hits me like a bus! I can relate to this piece so much since... I'm bound to the expectation of society that I can never be truly free to be who I am. Wonderful piece!

[Zephyr]

We can be ourselves if only we have the guts to be. I realized it only now. You too can be as you are a strong person☺
Thank you so much😀

[Bear]

A mental prison is the strongest and hardest to be freed from. I thank Nizz as well and hope he can continue to inspire and influence your writing talents. Well done my friend Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Bear.
Its hard to be free from a mental prison. But its all the more funny if we think about it. Barless prison! Joey is a great friend. I love reading from you Bear☺

[Rassoul]

Amazing poem Neetha, nicely written.

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Rassoul😊