Game-time...

Bloody smart...

“Be smart!”

He warned. As if that was necessary.

“I will be”

I replied back defiantly.

As I set out on my mission, I felt a whole new level of energy building up inside me.

I felt excited and thrilled to the core.

Even though it’s my first attempt, I knew I would be successful.

Straight and hard.

Meanwhile, I had already spotted my target.

He was lost in his own world, or rather, sunk in a muddle of self-induced problems.

“Pathetic humans!” I smirked.

I quickened my pace and got along with him.

He was flummoxed by my presence.

The red lips and dark eyes had cast its spell.

But soon enough, his face contorted and his eyes grew wide from fear.

A sly smile spread across my face.

As I pulled him closer and my fangs sank into his fleshy human neck, I felt a wave of satisfaction roaring inside me.

Its game-time…

Author's Note

Be free to criticise me.
This is my first attempt writing from a villainous perspective.
Your reviews would be of great help:)

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (Its game-time…) It's - the possessive pronoun "Its" should be a contraction instead

Review: This is a great writing exercise it allowed you to express your sensitivities allowing them to deceive your readers from the true nature of your story. This gave your ending a chilling impact with the sinking of the fangs, Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Bear:)
Your reviews are always helpful and great:)

[Donicca Dona L]

ohh this was surprising and interesting at the same time....
i think you should try yourself in every genre
till you find the one that fits you best.

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Donna:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

I would have not imagined that you would write this way... Really nice one and quite interesting... Hope to see some more of work... Keep writing :)

[Zephyr]

As a writer I think I should try out different styles and perspectives.
Happy to know you liked it:)

[.]

Aha! A vampire!

You managed to maintain the suspense through the entire story length. I certainly was wondering where you were going with this story! In the end it comes together smoothly and with polish.

A nicely written short story. Well Done.

[Zephyr]

I am actually glad to read your review Doodley:)
Thank you so much!

[.]

Very welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. You made me want to read and know more. I liked the energy of the words and the strong ending. Thank you Neetha for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Coyote!:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.

[Joey Nizz]

Such a beautiful and interesting read.
This story got me hooked.

Well done Neetha!
Thanks for sharing.

[Zephyr]

Thank you Joey:)

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[Alex Ware]

You don't really need 'replied back', just 'replied', but it's a small thing. This is a promising start to what could be a longer arc :)

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Alex:)

[pragya gaur]

Your first attempt is really appreciable .... Thanks for sharing

[Zephyr]

Pleasure Pragya:)

[Mr.Write]

“Pathetic humans!” I smirked.

You just became my favourite writer on this site. XD

[Zephyr]

Glad to hear that Mr write!:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

beautifully written....
keep going girl.

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Wajiha:)