Minimalistic.

There is a hidden plea/plot to this rather short piece. Feel free to comment when you see it.

Pits damp.
Lips quiver.
Eyes covered.
Arms tied.
Spin shivers.
Ears plugged.

Heart slows.
Exhale. Inhale.
Limbs limp.
Pulse stops.

Reviews

[DIVYA]

It took me to several places yet most strongly to death by some kind of a dangerous sex act...I'm sorry if I'm way off mark. I really love experimental and creative writing...one that tests the intellect...like this piece. Happy writing Nefertiti!

[Thepensiveplayer]

Interesting. This poem echos a cry for help while the person struggles to contain it within their fear. When it's all over the cry wasn't answered promptly and then the last bit of life leaves them. Excellent work!

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

I love how much depth you got from this very, very minuscule piece. But you are correct. There is a hidden message inside of this.

Thank you for the review!! I love your interpretation.

[Alessander]

Dig this. I normally don't advocate periods [.] but it works here to set up pace.
Sex and Violence they say. This could be coitus or death. Le petite mort.

Very streamlined.
Excellent

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

Thank you for the review!! Haha.
I do like how you saw it. Sex and/or Death. I am a more....morbid type of writer. Crime, gore, suspense. But always blunt.

However, with this one it was a bit of word play. Minimalistic in its sense. Leaves the reader to their own interpretations. Plus, if you really take a look at it. There is more to be seen. A plea to be honest.

[Alessander]

Please help! Can't believe I missed that! Awesome

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

Haha!! Yeah it’s hidden in plain sight!