Numb

It's gone

All emotion.....

Lost...

Never to be found...

Stuck in the darkness

I'm all alone

My heart is frozen

I'm cold..

My hands are shaking

All I feel

Is weight...

On my shoulders,

From the world

The pressure is astounding

It's funny

I have you

Yet I feel alone

I'm numb...

Waiting for you to come save me...

To wrap your arms around me

And kill the pain inside me

The sum has now doubled

Loneliness is the cause

It stabs at my gut

Terrorizes my heart

Blood spills on the floor

But I couldn't care less...

If I died right here

I wouldn't feel it

That's the beauty of it

Of being numb

You could die

And get what you want

The benefit of it

Is it'd be painless

The question is...

Is it worth it?

Your mind answers that

Yes, and why?

Because your worthless

Just do it and be done with it

You won't regret it

Give it a try

Let me prove it

Put a gun to your head

Pull the trigger

And I promise you...

You won't feel it.

Reviews

[E.V. Black]

"Loneliness is the cause

It stabs at my gut

Terrorizes my heart

Blood spills on the floor

But I couldn't care less...

If I died right here

I wouldn't feel it

That's the beauty of it

Of being numb"

One of the worst things in the world is to feel alone in a sea of people. Never feeling loved. Wanting something but pushing it away because it can't be possible, it ISN'T possible. Everything is impossibly gone and all is left is the raw loneliness, making a heart ache.

This poem made those memories of loneliness resurface in my mind, which I know that I will never forget. Loneliness is such a potent entity and threatens to haunt us. You really portrayed how powerful it really is through short, simple phrases and the emotion in here. I really do hope your loneliness goes away.
You have so much, okay? We are here for you. Message me if you feel like talking.

[Dewella~Vintella]

Very deep, emotional and....profound. I found myself relating, feeling the gut wrenching feeling all over again as if it had never left my side. Being able to not only express stunning emotion through words, be re-creating them is a wonderful talent. Your flow and use or words was beautiful, you captured my attention and kept me to the end.

Wonderful work.

Vintella~

[Stephanie Slayer]

fantastic work

[Brittany W]

Very deep and poem, you really convey the emotions of loneliness in the poem.. great job.

[Magic plus the mayhem.]

This is a great peace!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

wow, the ending so powerful, and this is filled with such emotion, feeling, deepness... many lines in this i liked a lot and enjoyed :D this is really really good

[shoaib]

wow... deep write
very moving and powerful
hope all is well

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a very emotional piece... I loved the feeling within it...though apparently you weren't supposed to have feelings because you were numb. I loved the flow of this. This was a great poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Rene Velez]

raw emotion, unhappiness is the sum of some of the finest poetry and this poem shows no less, nice write, thanks for sharing