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A Poem by Ness of Love
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The feelings of two cannot compare to the despair that comes from both.

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My hero!
How I wish for 0 again,
Nothing hurt the heart then.
The pain, there was none.
But when I looked at the bright, shining sun,
A face, yes a face, appeared, what fun!
Now, my heart has sunk, hurts by a ton.
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A player, total player
He needs prayer.
One thing is said,
But that usually becomes dead.
This all hurts my head,
To the extent when I lie in bed,
Thinking of his face.
What a happy place.
The best place for another girl no doubt,
I just want to tear my heart out.
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Existence?
No way, there is to much distance.
Heartache?
I want it to take a break.
How is there any attraction?
Maybe he’s just my distraction?
The flutters I get can’t be replaced,
My heart beats so fast it’s like I’m being chased!
Chased away from him, I guess.
Then it would beat less.
1 and 1 make 2
What should I do? 
2 is a crowd,
But I cant scream that out loud.
Oh, how I feel the guilt.
How it makes my vision tilt.
The love I feel for these two is a crime,
But crime involves time.
My time will be wasted away
While I wait for these 2 to leave someday…..
My mind will have to be made quick,
Before the clock goes tock, tock, tick.
It needs to be made,
Before I fade.
Fade away, out of love,
Before I get sent to up above.

© 2011 Ness of Love


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Very nicely done! I loved the humor with which you described what that now appears as a hopeless situation. The end is quit dramatic, but definitely fits the world view of the character. Loved it! only one remark- sometimes the periods stopped the flow of the reading, and (in my opinion) weren't always necessary =)

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This is like one of my favorite poems ever! You really captured the feelings of falling but not knowing where to land. Very nicely done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very nicely done! I loved the humor with which you described what that now appears as a hopeless situation. The end is quit dramatic, but definitely fits the world view of the character. Loved it! only one remark- sometimes the periods stopped the flow of the reading, and (in my opinion) weren't always necessary =)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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