you need to die

this was written for my step dad. i believe that he is one of the most terrible people that has ever lived!

I hate everything about you... You need to die....  

I don't want you in my life.  You think you
me, well your wrong.  You kill me on the inside.  
You make me pull the knife out.  
You instigate me until I bleed, until I cry out in pain.

I hate you... You need to die...

You keep me
from the things I love.  You keep me from living.  
One of these days your going to feel everything
I feel.  I curse you until the day you die.

I hate you... You need to die....  


I don't want to see your face in my life
anymore.  I hate the way you look, I hate the way
you walk, I hate to even hear your voice.  
I hate living with you.  Every time I see
you my body cringes.  Because I know you feel
the same about me.  

I hate you... You need to die...

You hate me too.  
You want me to die.  If you could you would put the
knife in my hand.  You are the one who put
the voices in my head.  To make them stop,
I need to stop your heart.  

I hate you... You need to die....

Your going to feel the depression. Your
going to feel the pain of loneliness.  
The pain of razor's cutting through your skin.
Your going to be haunted by the voices, and monsters
in your head.

Reviews

[TamerQtaish]

Well as a writing its pretty good, and I my self walked the path of hate for many years, to cut it short for you friend, at the end it will sting forever, the energy and time you will lose in hating someone would sure drain you, happened to me, even worst for me! It wasn't one to hate, I had many... And after 3 years of a vortex of anger and rage, I came to wonder what I've gained and how much I went away from the path that I started from! Basically, if you need to hate right now, at least channel it in a form where you hate the evil but not the ones that carry it, feel pity on their souls for losing track, but dont HATE them, in the end HATE is a big word...

As a poetic peace I would sure tell you it aint bad, but its not so unique! To make it so, reflect what made you write it in the first place, and stay away from the original for of how must people would say it! Give it a twist, shake it with wonders, and then you would have a clear cutting message plus a peace people would connect to more, as you add the space for wondering, people fill it in with their own problems!

all the best,
Tamer Qtaish

[Michael W. Farrelly]

This is like a scream to the Universe. But it takes so much energy to hate that it is rarely worth it.