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Searching

 

I

Used

To

 Look

 For

  Rainbows

 

In

 Those

 Tears

 As

 They

 Fell

 

Into

 That

 Tiny

 Saline

 Reservoir

 

Of

 Your

 Navel

 I

 Once

 Knew

 So

 Very

Well

 

I

  Also

 Searched

 For

 Secrets

Hidden

 In

 Your

 Eyes

 

And

Those

 Tucked

 Behind

 That

 Mirror

 I

 Have

 Since

 Grown

 To

 Despise

 

     

 

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Wow. I don't know what I was expecting when I stumbled across this piece, but this throws my expectations entirely away. This for sure exceeded them, and it's rare I found a piece that feels like something I would attempt to write. This is so, so, gorgeous and beautiful and I just love the whole thing. (:

[Neville]

How very kind you are.. please accept my apology for not responding before now, for some reason, your words of encouragement failed to trigger the usual notification ... Many thanks and All Good Things,

Neville ...

Oh' and do keep writing .. I shall visit your posts very soon :)

[Vertigo Cat1111]

It's no problem! It happens at times. (:

[Neville]

I believe the Café has a few gremlins at the moment .. as far as I am aware, a few people have notified the administrator .. we shall have to see whether these glitches improve .......... N

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! love the very intimate, romantic heart of this and your turn is killer sir! top notch says i! really hit me ... years of a relationship that brought tears .. yet long striving to keep finding those rainbows in it .. reality strikes home ... heartbreaking mistake acknowledged .. the image of tears falling into her navel and looking for rainbows is so powerful says i... so glad i did not miss this ... top o' the mahrnin' to ya Nev! ... i also think the form fits the "falling" so well ... felt me self tumbling head long after V2
E.

[Neville]

.. your thoughts and words above mean far more to me today Gene than I shall probably ever let on .. I am however, massively grateful to you my friend ..

Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

i think it a very real love story ... going to be thinking of those rainbows today for sure ;)

[Neville]

... it is absolutely one of those based on nowt but fact .. cheers mate .. shall raise my pint pot to you this coming Sunday @ 12.30 ish my time :)

[Einstein Noodle]

that would be about the time i get up in the wee hours wouldn't it? at any rate .. i am with you .. one pint pot Sunday ... slainte!

[Neville]

down ya neck buddy ............. just a quick un and then you can hit the sack again ... maybe ....................... slainte sir :)

[lightsong]

are You talking about aging dear Neville? I must say I didn't expect the ending at all, also that it's really sad but the well-written words here make it beautiful, rainbows and tears? that's something really creative and very lovely, always there is hope even though tears isn't it? :)

[Neville]

.. looking back, I think I may have just surprised my self with that unexpected ending maybe .. your visit tho' makes it a happier start to today .. and I do thank you for it :)

[Chris Shaw]

Another old poem out for an airing. So good to give them a breath of fresh air, blow the cobwebs away and give new people an opportunity to read them. Well I am far from new but reading something years later you can always find something else to say. That bloomin mirror has got alot to answer for and there were plenty of hidden secrets here. I couldn't help feeling that the format of your lines resembled a sharp knife :) Your lines were not happy ones.

Chris

[Neville]

Yes, another old un .... thanks Chris .. sometimes a little sunlight and a breath of fresh air can make all the difference cant it ........... Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

A little sunlight where there has been prolonged rainfall and a breath of fresh air where the air has grown stale can make a huge difference. For some reason your response took me back to the morning after one of my Mum and Dad's many parties when I was in my early teens. Couldn't wait to get all the windows and doors open. Get the sunlight in and a good strong breeze to take away the smell of beer dregs and f*g smoke..Good morning Neville.

[Neville]

....... I do seriously get ya ... my folks had parties like that .. boy could I tell a tale or two ... but then, I imagine a lot of us could ...........

[Chris Shaw]

:)..............

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a tender poem. Tears are a way to the soul to cleanse unwanted pain.

[Neville]

.. an intriguing thought & who am I to argue .. I am prepared to thank you though & do .. thank you PB and truly ..

Neville

[Poetic Beauty]

You are most welcome

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful that you looked and felt so deep with truth of heart and soul- just sad that they don’t seem to have been worthy of it- it would’ve been so much easier if we could foresee the future to prevent heartache and pain- wonderful words you use - meaningful🌹

[Neville]

my goodness me... ta a lot... nah ta muchly.......N

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure muchly🌹

[barleygirl]

I’m not a fan of this formatting, my friend, as it’s a choppy read. I lose the flow of what your graceful words are conveying. But I do very much like your message, especially the ending part about the mirror. As always with your writing, this is filled with imagination & feeling (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Sorry for the delay in getting back to ya Margie.... I understand completely...not everyone's cuppa tea but am gonna nug ya anyway...... N

[Chris Shaw]

This poem speaks to me of a beautiful romantic love. Rainbows are so uplifting, but then I pick up on something else completely, a change in emotion. Secrets, searching, and something to do with that mirror and what was tucked behind it. Your short poem gives me pictures, of different situations. I got my own movie from it. That's good poetry. Thank you and good morning Neville.

[Neville]

You are far too generous for words Christine so will just say thank you & mean it........ Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Cherrie Palmer]

the blending of hearts a never ending masterpiece of highs and lows

[Neville]

Hey Cherie, I am most grateful for your views, genuinely appreciated. Regards, N