Thinking Backwards

Thinking Backwards

A Poem by Neville
"

a kinda reminisce

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Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

© 2019 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

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That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'.. read more
Lorry

3 Years Ago

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀
Neville

3 Years Ago

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)



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dearest Neville... I also have memories of being in a forest
and showering with a bucket of warm rain... touching and feeling
the presence of tenderness... that still remain. Beautiful poetry
etched with blue forgetmenots. truly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

kindred spirits I reckon... and I do so love blue forgetmenots………….truly, Neville
Beautifully written. It instantly gives you a image of a far of place with peace and your loved ones....
The language used is very nice and I really liked the whole style of the write-up and the story it conveyed. Great work as always:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much Anjeline, I am truly grateful to you for visiting and considering these words... N.. read more
Anjeline

2 Years Ago

My pleasure:)
Neville your laughter tickled the tree trunks and tantalized the canopy and the rings wafted to the stratosphere and sang songs of satisfied purpose to billow yet another day:) I know cause I just saw one drift past me rather pleased looking

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

Well blow me down.. I am tickled pink :)
oh my goodness ...well done Nev! i was completely taken off guard ..really like what you have done with the smoking and smoke rings .. and that forest shower surrounded me with first loves and romance ... never took a shower in the forest with a bucket .. the contrast with the warm golden sun is pretty precious ... i did however ... build a backyard outdoor shower ... which was delightful and exciting ... wonderful poem sir... enjoyed reading ... would not change a thing! killer turn in closing ..so melancholy ... :(
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

I am delighted you found these words Gene and am truly grateful for your ongoing encouragement and s.. read more
They say first love is always the sweetest and indeed those halcyon days and serene summer nights linger long in the memory, and it’s only natural that we wonder will such harmony and perfect symmetry be within our lives once more? 💕.

Nice one Neville, just like the age old romantic bards of England, you hit all the right buttons in fine flowing, eloquently penned words!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

Far too kind for words so ya are.. but gotta say a mahoosive thank you Tom THANK YOU TOM :)
Thinking backwards creates some wonderful, evocative emotions, well done, N, echoes of smoke rings in laughter,

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago

Cheers Gram... now there's a thought & true.... N
Reflections of past moments, treasures in the mind. To be brought out and viewed again through older and wiser eyes. Your first two stanzas are filled with vivid and sensual imagery. I particularly liked your expression, third stanza last three lines. That really comes through. Another super write Neville. Good morning.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago


thank you Chris.

Neville
Wow, this is so well written, your imagery wonderful as well. Nicely done i found this emotional really

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago

you are far too kind but I sincerely appreciate you visiting and leaving behind such encouraging wor.. read more
Spectacular!
It's smooth, vivid, blended emotions, that demand a trip to a day and time long past, but still saved in each heart.

Even after a night of killing off poor extras in my story I still love a well executed romance.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cherrie Palmer

3 Years Ago

PS an eye catching title.
Neville

3 Years Ago

cor blimey.... I cant thank you enough Cherrie

N
A treasured scene worth thinking backwards for Nev - - you never fail to instill the need for knowing more of your intriguing stories - - so glad I caught this romantic "kinda reminisce" first class writing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago

I am truly most appreciative of your time and consideration for my words dear Fay.. many thanks inde.. read more
Fay Slimm

3 Years Ago

My treat to read your work Nev because you and your words are worth it........... Fay
Neville

3 Years Ago

............ aw bless ya Fay.. thank you too N :)

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