Wax Butterflies

Wax Butterflies

A Poem by Neville
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............. if ever a love there was.. but beware of those Panama Hats :)

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Wax Butterflies

 

I do still miss her you know

at least I do

occasionally ..  

and always in a panama hat ..

No, not the one you gave her

but similar ..

and sitting, sipping water from

the same cracked stone jug ..

That’s how I often picture her


these days


and anyway ..


The last time .. the day was a


b***h ..  talk about hot ..


Even so, those old well-worn steps

were still cool


and kind of kind to the feet ..


Did I mention she


appeared to me, then to be


drowning and lost tho’ in my

oversized


and paint daubed shirt .. Yes

the one, that used to be mine

Tired as it was


and tied loose at the waist ..


Hey, dont you think she looked great

Yes I noticed the same buttons


were missing

and that look on her face,

the one that said


Yes, this is me and I’m free


Oh’ f**k .. for a moment or two


I almost forgot she was free ..


But hey ..

my imagination ran riot that day

and for all that I know

she may have just melted away

right there, before

these very blue eyes of mine ..

Much like that wax butterfly

she once took from the window

to protect


and keep out of the sun ..

As soon as I dared tho’ turn around


and look back,


They had both disappeared and were gone ...

 

© 2020 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
...................... Poetry, it aint just words, is it ... N

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A quality poem. If this was the one you were working on yesterday it's understandable why you penned only one. Something really touching about her wearing your old paint daubed shirt. I wore my Dad's dressing gown after he died so I could be as close to him as possible, smell his essence. Wearing another's clothes is very special in my book. The last day and then she was gone. Memories though live on and have a habit of resurfacing from the ocean:s floor when we least expect it. Wax butterflies, yes they need looking after too. Lovely poem Neville.


So I' ve come back for further reads and you have made alterations to the original stanzas, and text as well.

Reading it now, this reads like a conversation with another person about the girl in the Panama hat. This time I am thinking this must have been a close relationship and a separation followed. Maybe a death came later. There is just a hint there, but I can't be sure. Maybe she was a butterfly too who wanted to be free. In any case the she here has made a lasting impression over time. Sad ending to a love affair.

Chris

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


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no...it isn't Neville .. not just words at all .. and your poem hits that mark with such sadness and underlying pain ..I think this is strong scene and character building ... i can see her and feel his heart .. well done .. don't we all just have one such as she .. or wished we did .. even if only to loose her ;) so poignant in that it seems he is talking to her new man ... both sharing what she gave to those who loved her ... she's passed on hasn't she Nev?! :(((((((((((((((( well done ... really like the stone jug .. the hot day and contrasting steps that are kind to the feet .. the same missing buttons .. the conversational style of yours drew me in ... its just a really fine genuine poem sir! thanks so much for sharing it.
E.
ps. love the Panama hat!!!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


mine this Sunday will be made just across the lane from me and o'er a little hill called Ham.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

I'll have Guinness the dark ... i rarely look past the next few minutes but now Sunday is taking on .. read more
Neville

10 Months Ago


the seat next to the cool cabinet has your name on Gene :)
So you noticed too that the paint daubed shirts have a habit of becoming theirs once worn. Leaving it to be one of two infuriating things.. One, that those you love just have a habit of making things better, or two... I forget what two was, but I think that may be part of their allure, making us forget anything and everything that isn't seen or felt in the now.
I was going to give at least six explanations of why this is so good Neville, but keep thinking of where those dabs of paint were daubed and can't think of anything else.
Women eh? Showing us up for the simpletons we are.
Flirb, wibble etc 😀

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


... Hi five called for in aardvark maybe 😀 Cheers L... hope you are well :)
Lorry

10 Months Ago

As well as I'm ever gonna be mate 😀
Neville

10 Months Ago


thank Bodhidharma I was not required to answer that question .. but good to hear 😀
Your words bring this scene to life, Neville. And that hat, the Panama hat. Not to be confused with a fedora, is the piece de resistance. A touch of unpretentious class. I can't quite make out if she is real or imagined. Too good to be true, but I suspect she exists for real.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


How bloomin kind of you Ana .. many thanks indeed .. a gentleman never tells tho does he :)
Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

If he did I suppose he'd not be a gentleman :)
Neville

10 Months Ago


absolutely..
They melt away right before our very eyes and we stay wondering forever where they went....this is beautifully written dear sir. Touched my heart.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


then I have achieved summat this eve.. bless you my friend and truly :)
AJNJ

10 Months Ago

You stay blessed too! Happy new week ! :)
Neville

10 Months Ago


and you too my friend :)
next time could you please put a warning message up... Warning before reading this please prepare for your heart to fall out of your chest:( this is magnificently beautiful expression Mr. Nev! I am I got no words to say but beautiful

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


then I shall just say bless ya and thank you my bunny friend n true :)
Mmm Thank you
I have been keeping quiet since ma in law left us > It was imagination ...ec.

I was unloading our van some people were passing I turned to pick up another box, as I turned bach - she was there Brown coat, hat and shoes to match
Ithey have let me come to see you, I know you have much to sort out. I am in no hurry < they are going to let me wach over you - I have to go now, I will be there close by but you wont see me again. She waked out of the sheild made by the open van doors, when i looked after her there was no sign - no other people out there

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


Whilst sharing is not exclusive to us humans, it can be oh' so ever so can't it... Many than.. read more
A quality poem. If this was the one you were working on yesterday it's understandable why you penned only one. Something really touching about her wearing your old paint daubed shirt. I wore my Dad's dressing gown after he died so I could be as close to him as possible, smell his essence. Wearing another's clothes is very special in my book. The last day and then she was gone. Memories though live on and have a habit of resurfacing from the ocean:s floor when we least expect it. Wax butterflies, yes they need looking after too. Lovely poem Neville.


So I' ve come back for further reads and you have made alterations to the original stanzas, and text as well.

Reading it now, this reads like a conversation with another person about the girl in the Panama hat. This time I am thinking this must have been a close relationship and a separation followed. Maybe a death came later. There is just a hint there, but I can't be sure. Maybe she was a butterfly too who wanted to be free. In any case the she here has made a lasting impression over time. Sad ending to a love affair.

Chris

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


it seems you have followed the metamorphosis of this particular post through several crucial.. read more

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