Endsong

Endsong

A Poem by Neville

Endsong

 

Hope

is where all wishes wait

 

In vaults too deep to contemplate

while time

 

Although preoccupied

declines to pause or hesitate

 

Yet seals

for eternity

 

The rich man

and the paupers fate …

 

 

 

 

© 2020 Neville


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Superb and profound Neville. I like the way you have staggered each thought. Works well. Yes, we are shackled to time -the great deceiver! Our common fate.
I feel winter coming on - usually it offers its own delights but we're all bit nervous.
It'll be fine!
Cheers,
Alan

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as.. read more



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Hi Neville - I love your poem, it reminds me of the regal grandeur of Ozymandias, lonely and timeless, in the desert ! x

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

6 Months Ago


Bless ya Linda .... and wot an absolute bloomin compliment you just bestowed upon this old f.. read more
Being chained to time is superbly described in this very readable rhyme my friend...... that final line says it all too...............x

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


... Many thanks dear Fay.. and always appreciated :)
Our fate is sealed, I feel. That makes this Endsong all the more beautiful. Sing it with hope, we must!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


absolutely and loud too ... and a big thank you my friend for checking in today :)
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

7 Months Ago

I'm very happy I did :)
The last two lines are the best. It's something that's gonna stay with me for a long while. Great work.
Lia

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


... Thank you most kindly Lia a much appreciated visit my friend... Neville :)
You are right Neville.
"Both the rich man
and the paupers fate …"
It is what we do in life that matters. Dead men can't enjoy life. Outstanding poetry my friend.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


Yes, it is precisely what you have just said Coyote .. it is the deeds that makes the man an.. read more
I love your rhyme & rhythm here, but I would delete "both" from the penultimate line (picky! picky!) It is my humble opinion (in agreement with your message) that HOPE is one of those fundamental necessities for staying sane thru life. I love the line about time being preoccupied -- very clever! (((BUOY))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


Thank you for checking and for that suggestion too Margie I shall make said amendment very s.. read more
It is easier for a camel to pass through the blah blah etc... But havent they heard of liquidisers and syringes? Just make a person-smoothie and fire it through a needle, job done.
Although saying that, have you seen the price of people-blenders lately? Bloody shocking 😀


Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


Hey.. I have been tinkerin with camels n needles while I've bin away mate ... now that's kin.. read more
Lorry

7 Months Ago

Ha, you should debone them first. Easier on the blades. 😀
Pingu is waving at you, saying h.. read more
Very nice, N. The conflict between human hope and merciless time is the stuff of philosophy and myth. Brief, spare and very accessible. Liked it.

Posted 7 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


.... Cheers John .. Much appreciated :)
Superb and profound Neville. I like the way you have staggered each thought. Works well. Yes, we are shackled to time -the great deceiver! Our common fate.
I feel winter coming on - usually it offers its own delights but we're all bit nervous.
It'll be fine!
Cheers,
Alan

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

7 Months Ago


Hiya Alan wot a smashing thing to say sir ... Yes me too, I can feel a distinct chill but as.. read more
Nev, do you remember soap on a rope? I think I'll put my hope on a rope, life is already such a slippy slope and hope is slippier than soap!:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Neville

7 Months Ago


... I do indeed .. and wot a bloomin good idea Rob ..
:)
Robert Trakofler

7 Months Ago

i'm gonna market it... Mr. Neville's world famous hope on a rope
Neville

7 Months Ago


... I'll take a couple of cases for good measure mate .. just let me know when ya in full pr.. read more

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