Variation on a Theme

Variation on a Theme

 

Welcome to your very own decay

You look older than you did

Even yesterday

 

Tired and bruised

Lounging on the very edge

Of your own personal corruption

But hey

 

You will feel it more than I ever did

Loosing it I mean

For I was never hideous or beautiful

But something in-between

 

And whilst I may not have

The most impeccable pedigree

I do have a

Handful of words

With which to beat you

 

And whilst I have already begun to mourn

Each individual and almost

Imperceptible loss

 

You have yet to accept and learn

That you are but a hairs breadth

From that certain point of beauty

I keep banging on about

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

any shmuck can write one poem. SO I thought I'd snoop on your page - and guess what. This is the second poem of yours that is wonderful (that I've read) You will feel it more than I ever did
Loosing it I mean
For I was never hideous or beautiful
But something in-between

And whilst I may not have
The most impeccable pedigree
I do have a
Handful of words
With which to beat you - this part was especially resonant to me. well penned.

[Neville]

Aw now I am lost for words TL please feel free to stop by anytime - I aim to reciprocate asap. All Good Things, N

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I'm getting too old and tired to be beaten with words; yours, mine, or anyone elses!
Fun writing, which happens to make alot of sense.

[Neville]

Much appreciated my Friend, your comments and opinions are always welcome and valued.
All Good Things, Neville

[Cherrie Palmer]

...Lounging on the very edge Of your own personal corruption.... ... what a excellent visual I truely enjoyed how you propeled the reader forward and brought this piece to a close.

[Neville]

I am bot truly delighted and grateful for your opinion of this work of mine. All Good Things, N

[R J Askew]

I like the dismissive tone here. It is intelligently insulting, relying as it does, on home truth. The cheerful self-depreciation underscores the slap. The first line and this line are my faves: 'You will feel it more than I ever did' .. the latter especially as it assumes a moral superiority. Provocative stuff.

[Neville]

Again, your comments and opinions are much appreciated and gratefully received. Ta muchley Ron,
read moreAgain, your comments and opinions are much appreciated and gratefully received. Ta muchley Ron,
AGT's N

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You bang on about a Certain Point of Beauty? I thought you were referring to your blade old sport!
Another dark and somewhat bitter piece well portrayed.

[Neville]

Yes I do, dont I. Dark & somewhat bitter um, sounds like a small chunk of Bournville chockie which is just what I needed earlier when I discovered one of my new run flat tyres (on my new BMW series 1 sports model) had been punctured, damn, damn, damn. N

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It's not meant for off roading, pillock!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Really you think that's bad. I broke down two weeks ago on the M25 with a less than year old car!

[Neville]

Did ya? How did the car get home? I win, two questions in one. S**t, I should have entered the two questions in one competition......... What do ya mean there aint one? I bet there will be before long... Hey ho

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Two recovery vehicles. One to Toddington and one to Northampton!