I Want To Take You Places

I Want To Take You Places

A Poem by Neville
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sometimes.. maybe ya just got to run with it...

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I Want To Take You Places

 

 

I want to take you places

 

I want to teach you slowly about yourself

I want to tell you all about you

 

I want to take you places

 

Then when we get there I want to

Take you in every one of them it’s true

 

I want to take you places

 

I want to have you in monochrome and

In colour too

Beside that lonely terracotta tub

 

I want to take you places

 

But then you know that don’t you

No comment is a cop out

 

I want to take you places baby

 

What do you want me to do and where do

You really want to go

© 2019 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
the original version of this would most definitely have required a mature warning... oh' well........... N

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Your lines Neville are direct, sensual and appealing. An invitation to the needy and there must be loads of neediies out there. But of course you mentioned the original had a mature warning. All your readers will want to compare the two poems now. Your directness and your cheeky no comment is a cop out, is clever. These lines make me feel.......a myriad of different thoughts.

Chris

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

what can a direct, sensual and all round appealing hard man say to that our Chris.. tis nowt but a m.. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Methinks you've got top notch marketing skills :)
Neville

5 Years Ago

bless ya our Chris and true x



Reviews

After you have taken her to places , do teach her how to write poetry like you do ... and see her paint all the dreams you made come true, my dear poet.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

thank you M.. I seriously thought about pointing her in your direction, so as she could learn proper.. read more
Mrudula Rani

5 Years Ago

No one writes sensual poetry, with class and good taste like you do my friend.
Neville

5 Years Ago

too kind and I love it... but you know that x
I want to go places, I realy want to you know: all those places I've never been before! These words will bring out the adventurer in any reader, drumming up exciting ideas of where or when it could be! Mixed interpretations on the - all left to the reader!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

should I concede defeat... nah you can have de feet, I will stick with the lambs tail and a strawber.. read more
kitty

5 Years Ago

Strawberry milkshake ...no, no, no de-feat Stop it or there'll be regret!
Neville

5 Years Ago

okay.. you win :)
I wonder if there will be a sequel to your updated version, where comment is made and after the cutness plays and you appropriately admit all fault lay at your feet (just an educated guess, considering all the options...you are male after all), I wonder if fair maiden shall melt and allow you to taker her to all those places, or should that be in? :)
Now say after me.... I've been such a fool dear, please forgive me for everything you think is my fault :)


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

what can a geezer say.... cheers L for popping in and checking these words of mine out....always app.. read more
Lorry

5 Years Ago

Not at all. Hope they resolve soon.
Neville

5 Years Ago

cheers Lorry so do I mate :)
This poem dances around the possibilities, as if merely nudging open the reader's imagination with your repetitive entreaty, rather than trying to put words to our fantasies. I love the way this suggests a clean canvas of exploration done expertly. You tease! (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

cheers BG...
Great offer given in the poetry. Nice when we can show and tell another. Life is open or close doors. Most of us. Too afraid to open new one's. Thank you my friend Neville for sharing your amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

tis me that should be thanking you my dear Coyote.. and so I shall.. thank you brother.. N
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

Always a pleasure to read your work and you are welcome Neville.
Neville

5 Years Ago

cheers my very good friend
I like it as it is - but then again, I haven't the x-rated version for a comparison ...

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

curiosity killed the cat.. so I'm glad of that.... cheers Lyn... I kinda like this softer version to.. read more
Your lines Neville are direct, sensual and appealing. An invitation to the needy and there must be loads of neediies out there. But of course you mentioned the original had a mature warning. All your readers will want to compare the two poems now. Your directness and your cheeky no comment is a cop out, is clever. These lines make me feel.......a myriad of different thoughts.

Chris

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

what can a direct, sensual and all round appealing hard man say to that our Chris.. tis nowt but a m.. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Methinks you've got top notch marketing skills :)
Neville

5 Years Ago

bless ya our Chris and true x
I want the original.
Okay, it's Sunday this will do for now.
If only we could put all our thoughts into action, what a time we would have.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

damn right.. and damn true & damn it I thank you... and I mean that.. cheers
Silence screams- for those to hear what needs to be heard- i want never gets- but sometimes we get what we need not want- and then we are complete- 🌹

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Years Ago

I certainly hope that every one will eventually find that certain utopiac destination, wherever it m.. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

5 Years Ago

We find what we seek its in your own hands- choices of truth- the heart is a noisy chamber- listen t.. read more
Neville

5 Years Ago

you are one wise lady methinks...

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