Broken

Broken

A Poem by Neville

Broken

The night arrived on time
Dark and desperate
Descending sweet yet tainted

Like black treacle
Cracked as old stained glass
Upon an empty table

Pain weary and measured
In the weight of dried fruit and
Petals of flowers strewn

Reed like tall and proud
Tho yesterday we were bowed
Seriously bent bruised and bled
 
Twas then we ached aloud 
Broke eternal
Pon both linen sheet and cloud

© 2019 Neville


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sounds like my first divorce...bent and broken...aching aloud...
this very dark and the imagery is pronounced...so good.
i am just wondering what would have happened if the night arrived late...would we have had more of a chance.
i like this one.
j.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Months Ago

Thank you jacob...very much appreciated... and who knows, maybe... N



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dear Neville... reminds me of an electrical fire that took away treasures such as
hand painted stained glass vases of delicate peacocks in speckled shades of turquoise
and feathered blessings, along with an antique water coloured Clipper Ship painted by my
classmates grandfather. Yes, we were broke Eternal, but in our minds eye we shall
forever enjoy their beauty. truly, Pat

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

thank you dear Pat, what a delightful response to these words of mine.. always appreciated, Neville
I been in that world of emotions that you speak of well done

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Months Ago

not a nice place, is it .. thank you my friend for your encouraging comment.. much appreciated, Nevi.. read more
Ouch that was a dark and stark night indeed, nice imagery in those words that you did bleed! I can hear those aches vividly in this write Nev:( make sure to burn those sheets and send that night back into the clouds!!!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Neville

5 Months Ago

All done and dusted my friend, a long long time ago... Only much more recently remembered and subseq.. read more
broken i like the word not because of negativity but because of the optimism that perhaps one day the shattered pieces can be joined again and be built anew

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Months Ago

Now there's a lovely thought for ya innit.... Thank you my friend, a most welcome visit and true... .. read more
Relationships eh? That's what can happen. You convey the darkness well and I liked the reference to black treacle. Thick and sticky, wading through that would be difficult for anyone. Your final stanza oozes hurt. There are no winners here it appears. Dark and broody like the storm clouds hiding the peaks in the fells.

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Months Ago

Dark & broody does it for me and fits the bill perfectly, thank you Chris
sounds like my first divorce...bent and broken...aching aloud...
this very dark and the imagery is pronounced...so good.
i am just wondering what would have happened if the night arrived late...would we have had more of a chance.
i like this one.
j.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

5 Months Ago

Thank you jacob...very much appreciated... and who knows, maybe... N

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