Cold Under the Coat

Cold Under the Coat

A Poem by Neville
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just words he say's .... say's me..... maybe a work in progress but with special thanks to Jacob for suggesting the title and his wisdom... cheers j.

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Cold Under The Coat

 

Oh my love

How I must have changed

Since we last failed

And so deliciously

 

You never faltered though

Or paused or turned

For one final

Backward glance did you

 

Nor did you drop one of your

Elegant gloves as we passed

In the second hand book store

I know because I checked

 

I checked the next day too

And despite it being summer

And with mercury still climbing

I recall a distinct chill

 

It was the moment the hem of your

Dress brushed past my knee

Yes it was then I promised myself

Another beard come winter

 

You may laugh but I have considered

Taking up walking with my mandolin 

Or a meerschaum pipe maybe

Perhaps you would notice me then

 

Although I trust my self less 

With you these days than I once did

With nicotine

Which took some quitting too

 

I kept the old green corduroy coat

By the way but only ever wear it now

In the garden and on special occasions

Because you once liked it

 

And because

It still smells of you

At least I think its you

It could be no one else for sure

 

Oh my love

How we have both changed

Since failing

And so completely

© 2019 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
I was going to call this the Final Hurt but some geeza changed my mind...

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actually I like the title you have...i like the whole idea of the coat...doesn't keep the speaker as warm now that she is gone.
the admittance that we failed...and he hopes she may just want to retake the course/ relationship and see if they could pass this time...
maybe "Cold under the Coat" for a title? i just like that coat idea mixed into this...Failing feels so cold.
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

tis done ta...
Fay Slimm

4 Months Ago

The picture you scribe does not look like a failure on the part of the writer - but love gone cold .. read more
Neville

4 Months Ago

absolutely ....



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Ouch ... this one is highly relatable for me. I love the way you have imbued and object with story and mood and I LOVE how you have capture the feeling of still loving someone who has forgotten you. Brilliant.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

1 Month Ago

Thanking you so much for checking in again my friend.. you are indeed most kind ... Neville
dear Neville... your poetry is like a Novel with Chapters that
fold into each other... her hem brushing against your knee in a bookstore...
the green corduroy coat that you wear on only special occasions, because she liked it.
A Gem of a poem that is like a Rode pressed between pages. truly, Pat


Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago


I sincerely hope those hummingbirds never learn the words.. coz I love em just the way they .. read more
Patricia Wedel

4 Months Ago

Merci mon ami...
Neville

4 Months Ago

................. :)
Every time I finished reading a stanza, I thought: I'VE LIVED THIS! You paint so many recognizable scenarios people go thru . . . love the comparison of quitting a person to quitting cigs . . . you not only state this plainly, but you also SHOW it thru-out your poem. This is so tangled up in awesome imagery I don't know where to start so I'll shut up for now! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

Well I must just say this.. I can not thank ya enough BG for the love and support you give me here a.. read more
You've actually describe it all well. I felt emotionally driven. It painful to have such an experience but at the same time increases our maturity and know-how of life and love.

Thanks for sharing this.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

thank you for visiting my friend....
Well failing brings us to where we are and makes us who we are - if we didn’t fail we would never accomplish - deep thoughts and feelings - too late or maybe not?🌹

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

You know it is never too late Kelly and hey.. you got a bouquet of smiles and thanks from me on the .. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

4 Months Ago

I’m waiting ...hope the colours are bright🌹
Neville

4 Months Ago

............ :) N
Wow! what a long write, but very well done, Love the metaphor like write. awesome

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

awesome does it for me every time ... cheers my friend... Neville
that was an awesome poem, Neville, the Final Hurt indeed, save the title for verse two the hurt and confusion and loss shout loud, the desperation we all feel, please notice me please love me,

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Neville

4 Months Ago

You probably have no idea how much your words mean to me ... many thanks indeed and true....
.. read more
Very interesting metophor poem. I enjoyed it. c:

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

I am pleased you found this page and felt able to comment .. a much appreciated visit JungLee.. Than.. read more
JungLee

4 Months Ago

You're welcome c:
Neville

4 Months Ago

...cheers... N :)
Sadness always associated with cold, perhaps reflective of how we feel inside when in pain with no one to turn to.
Cold, symbolic of being left exposed and unprotected from the hurt. No comfort to blanket us from it.
This is sad, in a beautiful way.
How we all change..change brings pain at times does it not, but so necessary it can be.
Touching words, I like it.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

Thank you kindly Lyanth .. a much appreciated visit.

Neville
Lyanth

4 Months Ago

It was a pleasure..
Neville

4 Months Ago

well thank you again then... N :)
Neville I can hear all the ladies here saying 'awww' she could at least left you a kiss on the cheek to remember her by and such an charming gent got nothing it does not seem fair, I would drop a hanky for you to retrieve so we could get acquainted good and proper like and no telling where it would go from there. ;)
You have made me sad with this one and wanting to give you what she never did you poor boy, I love how you made the coat a part of it all too [but I would have you steaming under it not cold] along with how instantly you fell for her with love at first sight what a romantic you are, thank you Neville -- sigh! ;)

HUGGS!
Sammi

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

Upon my very word.. what a luverly review you have left for me here.. How very kind and truly apprec.. read more

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