Thinking Backwards

a kinda reminisce

Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

Author's Note

dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

Reviews

[Lorry]

That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

[Neville]

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'cha... N :)

[Lorry]

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀

[Neville]

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)

[Fay Slimm]

Another viewing of this tender hold on memories worth keeping when little things meant such a lot and you poem that time so very well here Nev. A most moving read...............x

[Neville]

I said it before and am gonna say it again, bless you my friend and truly true too .. :)

[AJNJ]

A very sensual and warming read, dear sir. You've made some golden memories to cherish. Ultimately, it's the only thing for keeps.

[Neville]

I think that is my prime motivator PJ ... and I sincerely thank you my friend :)

[AJNJ]

Its a great pleasure always. :)

[Chris Shaw]

We seem to do more thinking backwards as we get older. When you are young you don't have the time. That warm rainwater sounds a delight. Sensual even. Good to read this a second time. Good morning Neville, windy woos this morning. Pegs well secured and we are staying put.

Chris

[Neville]

sounds like a good idea our Chris .. and thanks again :)

[light and ashes]

Sounds very nice.... an enjoyable read.

[Neville]

I am delighted you should think so .. thank you Allie B :)

[light and ashes]

You're welcome

[Neville]

:) .

[Ana Papaya]

I used to think time was a thief but then I realized how many memories it's gifted me too.
Lovely to remember such moments, isn't it?

[Neville]

Ah' but dont kid ya self kid .. time is indeed a thief .. it never just borrows and gives back .. that's why memories, photo's and poetry are so important .....

[Ana Papaya]

Yeah, probably true but I'm trying to look on the bright side, ya old curmudgeon :)

[Neville]

.. so are ya still on your holidays or what :)

[Ana Papaya]

I am. :)

[Neville]

... the old curmudgeon say's enjoy :)

[Ana Papaya]

Thank you :)

[Verse]

Time just tiptoes away, taking the laughter and the sun warm rain with it...

The love beneath the memory, and the wash of regret show this imagery in a kind of filtered photography mode, like Hollywood in the 70s.

Makes me wonder, and hope for you... may you rediscover the inside jokes stitched into the lining.

Great seeing you again, Nev! 😀😀

V

[Neville]

So good to have you here verse my friend.. it does seem an eternity for sure..... 😀😀read more
So good to have you here verse my friend.. it does seem an eternity for sure..... 😀😀

N

[alanwgraham]

I think that looking back is an intrinsic part of our human condition Neville. Unfortunately we have to take the good and the bad. You've done a great poetic job here, sweet and tender with all these particular memories and then the bittersweet realisation that they are no longer together. I've found that when you reminisce with someone your recollections can be quite different.
Hope all's well with you.
Alan

[Neville]

hello Alan and thank you.. You are of course quite right regarding the sharing of recollections.. I have often been surprised by the marked difference, despite being aware of the many and varied reasons for this phenomenon....My eyes could be better but must not grumble... All Good Things to you and yours sir.... N

[Beccy]

Such lyrical beauty contained in this poem Neville. I read and was transported to that time and place you so enchantingly describe.

And of course, in writing this, you tell us precisely where that laughter lies; which is in a never to be forgotten memory.

Beccy.

[Neville]

I cannot thank you enough for visiting these words and for the uplifting comment you left behind Beccy … no bull but true :)

[R.E. Ray]

Neville, an exceptional account of what we might see and feel sitting along a creek or on a cabin porch, eyes closed, gray hair in the wind. I like the little snapshots and flashbacks you inserted here. Regardless of where we grew up, I think this touches many, especially writers. I has a happy-sad feeling and so sincere.

[Neville]

I dunno how I managed to miss your luverly message until just now R.E Ray.. but I am delighted and thank you muchly.....