Thinking Backwards

Thinking Backwards

A Poem by Neville
"

a kinda reminisce

"

Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

© 2019 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

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That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'.. read more
Lorry

4 Months Ago

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀
Neville

4 Months Ago

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)



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Thinking backwards creates some wonderful, evocative emotions, well done, N, echoes of smoke rings in laughter,

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Months Ago

Cheers Gram... now there's a thought & true.... N
Reflections of past moments, treasures in the mind. To be brought out and viewed again through older and wiser eyes. Your first two stanzas are filled with vivid and sensual imagery. I particularly liked your expression, third stanza last three lines. That really comes through. Another super write Neville. Good morning.

Chris

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Months Ago


thank you Chris.

Neville
Wow, this is so well written, your imagery wonderful as well. Nicely done i found this emotional really

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

you are far too kind but I sincerely appreciate you visiting and leaving behind such encouraging wor.. read more
Spectacular!
It's smooth, vivid, blended emotions, that demand a trip to a day and time long past, but still saved in each heart.

Even after a night of killing off poor extras in my story I still love a well executed romance.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cherrie Palmer

4 Months Ago

PS an eye catching title.
Neville

4 Months Ago

cor blimey.... I cant thank you enough Cherrie

N
A treasured scene worth thinking backwards for Nev - - you never fail to instill the need for knowing more of your intriguing stories - - so glad I caught this romantic "kinda reminisce" first class writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

I am truly most appreciative of your time and consideration for my words dear Fay.. many thanks inde.. read more
Fay Slimm

4 Months Ago

My treat to read your work Nev because you and your words are worth it........... Fay
Neville

4 Months Ago

............ aw bless ya Fay.. thank you too N :)
"but i crave you more than i ever did those Marlboros"
i crave to write lines like that.
smoke rings dissipated...relationships dissipated...
but the smell of the addiction to her...never quite did.
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

You write them all the time sir... that is why I visit you so often..... Cheers jacob.

.. read more
This is so damn good, I can't blather with my usual nonsense becuz I'm dumbfounded. You sent me right back to actual scenes from my life that look so like this. Especially bathing in a bucket. Now I want to write a poem about bathing in an ice-cold alpine stream! You inspire me with butt-kicking writing like this! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

and I just luv it when ya talk back dirty like that.... Bless ya my luverly friend & true.... (BUTTS.. read more
That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

4 Months Ago

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'.. read more
Lorry

4 Months Ago

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀
Neville

4 Months Ago

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)

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