A Walk in Progress

A Walk in Progress

A Poem by Neville
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A Walk in Progress

 

All my debts are paid off

I got nothing to lose

Although it’s more like a

Walk in the park

Than a round the world cruise

 

So remember

If I have ever been unkind

To you………...  you know

I would gladly go out of my

Mind for you

 

And ……… if I have ever

Been untrue to you

You know there is nothing

I would not do for you

 

Now my debts are paid off

I got nothing to lose

Although it’s more like a

Walk in the park

Than a round the world cruise

 

© 2020 Neville


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Neville

more work required methinks..

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Sounds quite perfect to me, dear Neville. Flows wonderfully and makes its point loud and clear; that even if we have hurt the ones we love or let them down at some points on our life's journey, we shall always remain in their debt and there is nothing we shall not do to repay that debt, be it large or small. For this reason, the journey is still a walk in progress, still ongoing. A fine idea that reads very well and my humble opinion says it requires no more additions. I enjoyed it very much! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago


far too kind my friend.. but I would be telling a lie if I said, I didn't like it... thank y.. read more



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This is a very satisfying poem to read Neville. If you reach the stage in life that all your debts are paid, if past hurts have been forgiven and are done and dusted, who needs a world cruise. Frankly one of them cruises would be at the bottom of my list for a long time, after recent events. We had the opportunity of going on one in early Jan with relatives, pleased I declined. A walk in the park sounds ok by me as long as everyone else doesn't get the same idea at the same time. This is a lovely poem Neville which has the feel good factor about it.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Neville

3 Years Ago


Aw gawd.. I got another blush rush coming on.. thank you Chris and true :)
Ach, who needs world cruises when you've got the freedom of now being rich enough to know you've no money.
I do think we'll be paying our way out of this lockdown until the next financial crisis, so we might as well enjoy it while we can. Go on, have another chocolate eclair.

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Neville

3 Years Ago


I shall have a custard tart & that'll be the end of it :) I owe ya tho and truly ..
This is so awesome, I enjoyed the feelings through out this write.

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Neville

3 Years Ago


I dont get many awesomes so I thank thee big time and true:)
It’s much easier than we think. Making amends, paying off our debts, telling someone we care. More a walk in the park than a round the world cruise. It comes easy when one cares. And it’s great to be understood by those who matter. That you can make it up to them and you would. Always. Very well said sir and most appreciated by this reader.

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Neville

3 Years Ago


you are far too kind my friend, but I like it :)
AJNJ

3 Years Ago

Not at all, my friend. It's a pleasure always! Great to read your words!
I ran away from my mind at an early age and haven't gone back since. I took leave of my senses and left. I read these lines, "if I have ever Been untrue to you You know there is nothing I would not do for you" and immediately thought, (except be true evidently) ...because that's what my woman would reply. Still, I liked the poem because it's about walking and it sounds like somebody in the poem is about to do some. Cool read.

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Neville

3 Years Ago

this is one of those that feels like I played a very minor part in its creation…. thank you for yo.. read more
we do make mistakes in relationships, but if the other person knows that we would do anything for him or her, and that we have paid our debts for our transgressions...there can be a restart. May not get us around the world...but at least from a point A to a point B, in mending the relationship.
I agree with Jamila...no adjustments needed.

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Neville

3 Years Ago


thank you jacob sir.. twas a Leonard Cohen melody that inspired this little scribble.. I sti.. read more
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Sounds quite perfect to me, dear Neville. Flows wonderfully and makes its point loud and clear; that even if we have hurt the ones we love or let them down at some points on our life's journey, we shall always remain in their debt and there is nothing we shall not do to repay that debt, be it large or small. For this reason, the journey is still a walk in progress, still ongoing. A fine idea that reads very well and my humble opinion says it requires no more additions. I enjoyed it very much! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago


far too kind my friend.. but I would be telling a lie if I said, I didn't like it... thank y.. read more

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