Tempting Fate

Pushing the boundaries. How far is too far? Coincidence or fate..

        Early morning, empty bottles of wine define me

 Smoke doused clothes hang lifeless on my body

         The very seat I sit, repulsed by its obligation to console

  Scrunched up, ink raped paper lay beneath me

     Forgotten words, spoken prematurely

   Sitting up as my head punishes each sense  

  My blood stained shirt smiles up at me

        Smirking with a knowledge I will never understand  

  

   My mother once told me I have always tempted fate

      Never stopping to think that perhaps fate tempts me

  A role reversal, a bitter taste for a sweet tooth

 Too fragile for interrogation, nervously awaiting

        Fear reciting familiar lines that echoes the order

  Imperfections drain the limbs I hold close

      Running without legs in pursuit of the chase

  Stop to a red warning, the riot has run its course

 

   Clichés taint and damage an already broken soul

  Attempt living that life without one failure

     For me a sweet ignorance will suffice

  Give me that poison until I grow a resistance

   Memories converge, commune and commemorate

   Prophets, preachers and pessimists alike

        Ready for our reckoning, pleased with the damage

   Each one steps forward to collect their fate 

Reviews

[Muse]

Gresham...too many good lines to quote a favorite..
Give me a poison until I grow a resistance...another way of saying
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what does not kill you can only make you stronger?

We try to make a mockery of fate...but the question remains..is it fate..that makes a mockery of us? High scores.

Muse

[Polaroid Impossible]

I guess drinking the poison will always kill you, but slowly. The idea is to avoid death, an immunity to the reality of life basically. I'm still curious about fate.. Thanks :)

[Steven]

Personifying fate is a used a lot, but works well here in a different way. You are coming after it, rather than the other way around. The whole tone of the piece is one of numbness, and a desire to feel anything, even if it is painful. And those tend to be the easiest feelings to incite.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow the imagery and wording of this piece was so well done, deep and complex! Great work!
God bless

[Pax]

i really like the last stanza. it speaks so much emotions on around us. well done.

[pumpkin head]

Simply powerful and so well written.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

"Clichés taint and damage an already broken soul

Attempt living that life without one failure

For me a sweet ignorance will suffice

Give me that poison until I grow a resistance

Ready for our reckoning, pleased with the damage

Each one steps forward to collect their fate"

This...now this I like!

[Tattered Teddy]

Sweet! Amazing style you have here, almost reminds me of a Ginsberg poem. Love it!

[demureminds]

Ok, I love this, it's so beautifully written. The descriptiveness as well as word choice is plain phenomenal. The contradicting elements were also very enjoyable, well penned (:

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This is a great poem. I especially love the "Early morning, empty bottles of wine define me, Smoke doused clothes hang lifeless on my body" , and the last lines the best. Great work :)

-Cord

[TheJordBaker]

brilliant, some great lines in there and a terrific flow. good stuff.

[Hidden Happiness]

a bitter taste for a sweet tooth- amazing!!!!:O:-D