Stripped

6/29/12

The clothes are gone,

Everything has changed, 

Things are so wrong,

Nothing  left to face.

Even if you wanted to,

You couldn't turn back,

Where you are now,

You've chosen your path.

Stripped, desolate, and nude,

Everything is a rabbit hole,

Of the past, there is no proof,

Your pulse has gone cold.

Your words, once golden,

Now bronze and weak,

Your writing, your trophy,

Now tarnished and meek.

Your clothes are ripped,

The beauty you once beheld,

GONE with the blink of an eye,

Now you stand without a shell.

Every beauty you were once forever worshiped for,

Has been gutted and ripped away, nothing is as it was before.

Stripped of your dignity in every way,

You wallow in your naked state,

The strings of your clothes have frayed,

A new life for you, awaits.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[kayla]

This is very good, just a few grammatical and spelling errors:
"worshiped" should have two p's. I also think that the last line shouldn't have a comma, it should just say "a new life for you awaits", and in the third stanza the form/rhyme seems a little off.
But other then that, very well written(: