Twisted Fate

Twisted Fate

A Poem by Nicole Renee
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A collaboration with Frances L. Phillips

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Watching you flash before my eyes,
I wish that I could have saved you
From the chains you were bond to,
Wondering what else I could have done
To save a life this world of confusion and tears.
I knew that it wasn’t at the right time;
Coming in when a glass broke from the outside,
The commotion boomed and boomed until
I came in with a curious daze upon my face,
Seeing that it was only what fate didn’t intend.
Now that this hopeless heart is filled
With what it shouldn’t have been,
I think that the next time I trust
Another with a heart of mine,
I’ll keep out on my guard and hope
That there isn’t a twisted fate
At the end of my rope.

 

You tried so hard it wasn't meant
Oh how I wish So many nights weren't spent
Crying tears for things you cannot change
I know you want to go back and rearrange
all those events that stole your soul
Make them come out right and leave you whole
Sometimes fate can be so twisted
But I have back with a message please listen
I have watch your tears and all your sorrow
Your trepidation at facing a new tomorrow
But things cannot remain this way
You did what you could when my life was a stake
Nothing more could I ask of you
What you did was what you could do
And though what you wanted was not meant to be
Fret no more that you couldn't save me
I have no hate I hold no grudge
When I enter that land above
It will be with pride for my saving grace
Who showed the more beautiful side of the worlds face....

© 2008 Nicole Renee


Author's Note

Nicole Renee
I'm in blue and Frances L. Phillips. is in the lavender color. The part I wrote just came to me when I listening to a few songs....
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What'd you think? This was my collaboration with anybody! Thanks for collaborating with me, Frances. :]

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aww this worked out really well! i haven't done any collaborations yet... but it's definitely something i would consider, if i found someone i could work with... like you have here.

'I know you want to go back and rearrange
all those events that stole your soul "

those were fantastic lines.

but the call and response flowed very well, and had similar feels, but just enough so
nice job!!


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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"From the chains you were bond to,"...I think you meant "bound" to?

The whole poem was excellent but I think the part in purple was so much more passionate, your words flow more naturally and I get the feeling that you are pouring your heart onto the page, which is what writing is supposed to be.

Posted 11 Years Ago


"I wish that I could have saved you"

What song is that from? It's so familiar...

And I love this. I think you guys could've like pieced it together instead of writing half and half, but so what? It came out gorgeous. Great write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


i know how music can effect a writers mind, i have done it many times, great use of vocabulary and word usage. the emotions pour from this like water cascading down a clift, it is beautiful but also heart breaking. well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

aww this worked out really well! i haven't done any collaborations yet... but it's definitely something i would consider, if i found someone i could work with... like you have here.

'I know you want to go back and rearrange
all those events that stole your soul "

those were fantastic lines.

but the call and response flowed very well, and had similar feels, but just enough so
nice job!!


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very nice imagery.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A wonderful collaberation. You's both did wonderful writes. The flow is beautiful. Great job to the both of you. Kudos!


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Whoa, cool collaboration. ;) This was a really neat poem. You two did a great job! Thanks for sharing. ^^

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great work, both of you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very good collaboration you two. Beautifully penned. Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL You're hopping on the collaboration wagon? Great job on this

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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