Whisper of Freedom

Plants are fertile

but You and I were frail  

We were dry and withered

and bent to the ground.

 

There's a lot to say

but You and I said just a bit.

Like a near-death delirium

From the beginning, we said much nonsense.

 

There's a lot to see

but You and I saw just a bit.

For no reason in Autumn,

We asked the birthplace of "Acacias".

 

There is a lot to choose,

but You and I chose just a bit.

 

At the time that was right,

for love to blossom on the carpet

For no reason, we were even afraid

Of weaving roses.

 

There is a lot to read

You and I read just a bit.

You and I were afraid

to sing simple words of union

through the passages of winds.

 

You and I were frail  

But now we sing as "Us"

through the fields of Tulips.

 

We see as far as our vision

We choose free to our passion

We say as much as our intention

We go fearless, as we are destined.

 

You and I

Nonetheless, should be a merciless night

Yet a flower of Mary, awakened by dew.

 

You and I

should be together,

not crooked, aloft.

not tangled, in tune.

not betrayed, in bliss.

 

You and I

Can be the pulse of people

to combat against the false

at the center of this 

revolutionary movement.

There's a lot to say.

Author's Note

Many thanks to my friend "Lightsong" for editing this poem.
Reviews are appreciated.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

The 'see as far as our vision' verse is really powerful Nima. What I like to call poetic gold! A litany within a poem. Plants are also frail, as fertile as they are. I like how you compensate for human frailty by coming together as 'us'. And I really like that interesting antithetical verse, not crooked but aloft ... Let's hope when it happens that we can all sing together, we are in tune.

The Songstress of Light does blow poetical dust into our sight. And the hearts of our pens. I like to call her Poetess Omnipotess, among other things. Your poem glitters with dust. Powerful and primal.

[Nima.Hope]

That verse is mine but "we choose free to our passion" untill the end of that stanza was Lightsong's help
What a lovely phrase you used abiut Lightsong. She surely is the muse of poetry.
Wow, I learned many new words from you sir.
Thanks again, my gratitude is beyond words.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Nima… I learned so much about the History of Acacias Wood… fascinating… in Exodus and so forth. Our World needs to return to the simple things that we all share that are tried and true. Beautiful poetry. tenderly, Pat

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you dear Pat, I wrote it as a reaction to the freedom protests in Iran.

[lightsong]

This is so amazingly beautiful my dear, I feel it so personal to You. the tender voice of yours sweep through your lines, yet it holds the power, the power of kindness, care, love, humanity, courage, the brighter tomorrow, there is so much to come, so much to write about... few words might need a little change, but I understand what it means to write with a second language, I face the same struggles too. anyway, as I've said... a dearly beautiful poem, a favorite to me, I see that You are writing (you as You), I love it :)

[Nima.Hope]

Wow, I'm so lucky to see Ms.Lightsong comment on my poem, I'm extremely proud my dear. I think it needs some changes to become more rhythmic and effective. Your words made my day beautiful than ever.
I send you love as always

[lightsong]

Would You like me to read it with care and give You suggestions?

Good Coffee Morning Mr. Nima :>

[Nima.Hope]

Sure Ms.Lightsong,I'm all ears!

[Ken e Bujold]

an extremely well expressed plea for a nation's freedom. As poets it is our duty to say what must be said to lift eyes from their myopic visions, and to inspire with words. You have done both here Nima.

as an aside, just had a friend return from a wedding in Iran, he says it is an extremely chaotic place. I send my thoughts and best wishes for the deliverance of the nation

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you dear Ken for your thoughts and review on this poem. Yes, my birthplace, Iran, is a very chaotic place and we are fighting for the least rights that every human being must have. We have lost many freedoms that we had at the Shah's time, although the Shah was a bit dictator, he brought the country so much money and built the most necessary factories,cinemas and theatres and etc..
Thanks for your good wishes. I wish you the best my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we cannot be satisfied with just a bit of anything...or maybe that variety is the spice of life.
But it seems better to commit to getting the most out of whatever we engage.
There is a lot to say...and maybe it should be said.
I feel as a poet, you speak for the people...very expressive write.
j.

[Nima.Hope]

I agree with you sir, we must do our best on everything by using the maximum amounts of our facilities.
The last days of Iranians of lives were only fear,crying and sorrow, we only look for freedom, as Americans did and so I felt that this movement needs some poetic slogans.
Many thanks for your review, I appreciate it very much sir.
All the best wishes for you